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Review:CambAngst says:
Tagging you from the Review the Person Above You thread in the common room.

First off, let me say that your story involves my favorite pairing and is set in my favorite time period to read. I'm really pleased to have found it.

I really love the way that your story gives the characters -- and by extension, the reader -- a chance to grieve for all that was lost during the war. Far too many stories set in this time period seem to be based on the premise that everything in the wizarding world was celebrations and sunshine and puppies ten minutes after Voldemort crumbled to the flagstones. I don't think it could have been that way. Too many people died and too much was destroyed by the Death Eaters. Your version of events has a perfect sense of heaviness and realism to it.

I could go on and on about what a good writer you are. You have a really great knack for picking the right details to focus on in each scene and capturing the mood in the character's perceptions of the world around them. In the first scene, Ginny is so caught up in the comforting, somewhat inconsequential things around her. Hot chocolate and riding Ron's broom and her family's too-small pajamas and the warm, empty comfort of her bed. At this point, she's still avoiding the crushing reality of losing Fred.

The fact that she's trying to convince herself that she's already made her peace with losing Harry is perfect characterization for Ginny. Keep a stiff upper lip, tell yourself that it's what you expected to happen, pretend that it doesn't really affect you that much. For a youngest child who's led a tough life with a fair number of disappointments, that's the logical defense mechanism. Don't get your hopes up...

Gah, the funeral! Even through Ginny's somewhat shell-shocked point of view, it was almost too much. Part of me wished that you'd gone into more of the gut-wrenching details, but I don't think that would have been consistent with the way Ginny was experiencing life at that moment. She seems like she's mostly numb. Just living from moment to moment, getting by somehow. I loved that Harry always seemed to be there whenever Ginny was about to stumble. She doesn't even seem able to understand the support he's giving her, but she needed it nevertheless.

George's reaction to her failed attempt to console him was definitely the cruelest twist of all. I know that George didn't really mean it and I know there will come a time when he'll feel terrible about that one, disappointed look he gave Ginny, but at the moment I'm sure he just couldn't do any better.

Even at the end, when it's only Ginny and Harry, you didn't make things too easy for them. I really appreciate the fact that you've kept them as they should be: two very stubborn individuals who aren't especially good at expressing their emotions. There will be difficulties...

I would love to find something to suggest in the way of improving this chapter, some token thing that might help you make it better, but I can't. Everything, from the descriptions to the narration to the dialog and even the pacing was beautifully done. Excellent work!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for leaving a review :D

I definitely agree that the characters needed a time to grieve the losses of everyone who died during the Battle of Hogwarts. With a story starting this at this time and told from Ginny's perspective, this was a necessary chapter to be written.

Awww that is so so sweet of you to say :D I have loved writing this story and it makes me so happy when other people enjoy reading it! You've said such nice things and they really do motivate me to keep up the quality as I continue writing!

I also agree that certain things (Harry and Ginny's relationship) needed to be done realistically. That's one I've been struggling with, since I want them to just be together forever surrounded by unicorns and butterflies, but I've forced myself to maintain some sort of reality in their relationship.

I really am so glad you liked it so much! Thanks again for leaving such a wonderful review!
Christy


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