Ah, I really loved this so much! I remember seeing Reg/Barty hints in House of Cards and I love how you've explored it further - I think I'm going to start shipping it from now on since this is so convincing. You wrote the forbidden romance so well and it was very heartbreaking, I wish they could have been together and been there for one another, and then maybe things could have turned out differently. The descriptions of Barty imagining how his date with Reg could have turned out were really lovely.
He felt dazed, winded almost, his mind strangely blank. I thought this was a really great description of the simplicity of his shock and anger. You wrote his emotions in such a real and relatable way.
I feel so sad for Barty being alone here, for not having anybody to support him and to understand. His emotions at seeing the kiss between Regulus and the girl and his ensuing rage... it's not fair he can't talk to anybody about it. I also think you did a good job of hinting at the future Barty, it reminds me of how he explodes with excitement and anger at the end of GoF. I liked his anger at his father too and how he clearly resents him and the impact his father has on his life. I definitely cannot see the strict Barty Sr. being accepting of a gay son, sadly. :(
He could feel Regulus' warm body pressing against his, taste the ginger tang of Butterbeer on his tongue, I thought this was such a great detail since it was mentioned earlier that Regulus didn't like Butterbeer. So it's as if in conforming by going on a date with the girl, Regulus drinks something he doesn't like just as he's dating a person he doesn't like. I might be reading too much into this but it was a really wonderful little subtle message. :) The kiss was written beautiful as well. I especially loved this line:
(because she'd never kiss him like that, could never kiss him like that, should never kiss him like that). It was just so beautiful and sad and ahghh. ♥
The ending was just so heartbreaking, but not surprising. :( I really loved reading this and the insight you put into the characters and their relationship and Barty's adoring fascination with Regulus. It was so sad and lovely. Well done, I'm off to read your partner's story now! :)
Author's Response: Hey there - thanks so much for stopping by - this was such a great thing to get and so unexpectedly too! :)
Yeah, this is one of the small, relatively unknown pairings I just love so much and can't really explain it (though my undying hatred of OC stories might have something to do with it...) hence the hints in House of Cards, and then this. I'm just so grateful to my partner for letting me do this, haha! I'm so glad you liked it, and if I've converted you I definitely consider that a success! :D
Thanks! :) I wanted to go more for shocked, like a complete loss of emotion and reaction, rather than full-out anger, because he is such an emotive character, I thought it would be stranger for him to almost not-react, in a way, if that makes any sense at all.
I know! He has a really bad hand in this... it is pretty unfair! It's bad for both of them because they both can't talk to anyone about it, they just have to get on with it and act like nothing's wrong because no one knows and no one can know. It's such a sad thing, and so horrible to contemplate. Yeah, neither can I! I don't think Barty Sr would have been happy that Jr was even friends with Regulus, let alone more! :(
:D :D I think that's one of something like two minor details which are different between our two stories, haha. But yes, I did kinda want to show Regulus' conformity - so I'm so happy you picked up on it since it was definitely intentional (for once!)!
THank you so so much! I'm so glad you liked it - it's not the usual sort of thing I write, so I did find it a lot of a challenge - so it makes it so much better to hear that so thank you so much! :) :)