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Review:MargaretLane says:
Your song is very believable as a folk song and sounds very "English".

I also like your narrator's "voice." It's very distinctive.

And OH, I do like the mention of the "poor Irish". I have decided I dislike Cadmus Bode.

I also like this character's assertion that giants violent nature have been cultivated by their treatment at the hands of humans. That makes a lot of sense.

Love his rephrasing that sentence to say wives. And the part where he decides the children are too young to find his joke about wand size amusing.

Hmm, I get the impression Peakes is NOT a nice person. Just the description of his hand makes him come across as slimy and untrustworthy.

And the spell he does for the nobleman pretty much confirms my suspicion.

Wonder if it's the Sword of Gryffindor that Peakes seeks. Yeah, I guessed right.

Hmm, I'd guess the stranger is Nicolas Flamel. He is the only person I could think of who lived that long and his wife is Perenelle, which could be shortened to Nellie. He does seem rather less urbane than I would have imagined Flamel, but that is just MY headcanon and not canon at all.

Excellent first chapter. Looking forward to seeing how things continue.

Author's Response: Hello! :)

I'm glad you liked the song! I quite liked writing it and getting in the state of mind for the story. There are a few other stanzas which I wasn't allowed to post in this chapter so they might be making appearances later on.

I'm glad you like his voice as well! This very personal style of first-person narration is something very new for me, and challenging, but in a positive way.

Oh good, I dislike him as well. He's a very nasty, typical power-hungry wizard, I'm afraid. I believe from what I've seen about the forums that you're Irish as well so you'll have to let me know if I get any facts wrong - I've been studying the Irish literature of the period lately so it's been sneaking into my writing.

I figured that giants can't be all bad, and that their isolation and stigma would have lead to enhancing their aggressive natures. The character is very sympathetic to animals as well, and he doesn't like humans quite as much as you might have noticed.

Hehe, I'm glad you liked it! :) I figured he might get a little carried away by the story and have to remember his audience.

Peakes is... well, the narrator doesn't portray him very well, but he is very selfish and a little bloodthirsty. I thought the spell he did was so awful as well, but it felt like the sort of abusive service wizards of the time could make some easy money from.

Good guesses here! :) And yes, it is Flamel. I'm glad you picked up on that! I was going to put his identity in the story directly but there was no perfect place to fit it in. Haha, I know what you mean! His character is so funny to write here because he's been alive for so long. He sort of wrote himself here, but as he's talking to children he is a little more grandfatherly and gentle. He really dislikes a lot of adults and he holds grudges, just because he's seen so much human corruption over his several hundred years. He's... a funny one.

Thank you for the brilliant review, and for the awesome challenge! I had a lot of fun researching the story and writing it, and hope to have the next chapter up in the next couple of days. :)

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