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Review:MargaretLane says:
Hmm, Madame Pomfrey using a telephone. That's interesting. I would have expected her to use Owl Post, but I guess she's concerned as to how the neighbours would react to that. Or that it'd be too slow.

And it makes a lot of sense, sending Lily home if her family can't catch her illness.

Sounds like dragon measles is rather more minor than Muggle-world measles, although Dumbledore did suggest she might need hospitalisation if her condition doesn't improve.

By the way, "unwell" is all one word.

Like the description of lime-green spots.

And *laughs at Dumbledore offering strawberry bonbons*

It would probably sound better if she said "can I have a toasted bagel?" rather than "can I have toasted bagel?"

Interesting beginning and your summary is intriguing. I wonder if Petunia is really a witch.

Author's Response: Hi, thanks for your review.
I thought that I would Madam Pomfrey should use the Telephone in this scene because Mr and Mrs. Evans might get a bit angry if loads of owls went fluttering down there chimney.
It s worse than that - maybe I will include some more of the symptoms.
Glad you like that description, I was thinking of another word for green and I came up with lime from my brother.
haha. Dumbledore is obsessed with Muggle sweets so thought I'd put that.
I think I will need to edit 'unwell' and put the 'a' in 'can I have a toasted bagel?'
I have already written the whole story and I'm NOT telling you what happens. It's a quite an interesting suggestion though so thanks for your theory,
HEG :)


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