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Review:LovlyRita says:
Well hello my darling!! I am here to leave you a review on what promises to be an AMAZING story!

Ok first of all, can I just say that the fact that you have been to Africa makes your descriptions and your imagery THAT much more potent?? It's so believable because you've SEEN it. Maybe not the inside of a cell (I hope not the inside of a cell :P Unless there's something you're keeping from me?) but seriously. I can tell this is already going to be a story rich in detail and I seriously cannot wait!

Ok, to content. I love that you've opened it with a letter! How intriguing, and a bit creepy too. Because of the line with her writing it in the dirty from her fingernails. That's messed up :P But it really does such a very fabulous job of showing what a dire situation she is in with just ONE LINE. Fabulous work there!

And then her discussion with Teddy, at first I thought he was in a cell next to her, but when I realized he wasn't I was like wha!! I am so intrigued as to the events that lead up to this situation, and I am completely sure that you will get there in all due time :P

And can I just say that I am fangirling all over the place for your action?? What a great action writer you are! It's kind of a sin against humanity that I've never really read a lot of your work, but I think your action here is so detailed and so quick. You can just feel her terror as she's running away, and doesn't even know where she's going!

ok so here's something that I loved and you're probably going to be like um ok? That's a weird thing to love? But I LOVED how you introduced this new diabolical character into the fold, with a simple "Argh" and the following sentence. I admire it so much because I personally always struggle with ways to transition to a new thing with action, how to introduce something in a frenzied way without using the word "suddenly.. blah blah blah" so I loved that so much! Very well done, I am going to have to remember some of these tricks!

Ok other things, I loved your description of her cracked lips, itchy red eyes, etc. I'm always a sucker for things that happen on the body, although I must admit that itchy red orbs does has a ring to it, a little disappointed you chose not to go in that direction :P

Overall I really enjoyed it, and that's saying something because sometimes I find it really difficult to enjoy fanfiction nowadays but this I think is super unique and something that I could really get in to. So you should definitely keep writing :) Your writing style is so fluid and intriguing, I just loved this! WRITE MORE MARINA. MORE. WRITE MORE. :D hahaha. Just kidding. But only a little bit.

NOTE: I do understand there's another chapter. Don't judge me. I'm trying to be supportive.

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