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Review:toomanycurls says:
Hello!! Sorry I took a few hours more than I thought. Dinner with friends turned into a long affair of updating a resume and talking about opening a consulting firm.

That's really too bad because I wanted to be the first review on this story!

Starting this off, I feel like I'm being told a story by my grandpa. I could imagine being told this as a bedtime story and staying up late wanting to heart more.

I love that he's explaining that the sea serpant was a problem - I would have assumed that a sea serpant was a problem without explanation. It's interesting though that they aren't ferocious by nature.

mmm, old dirty port smells. x-|

I like the idea of magic having costs and benefits - that feels perfect for an old timey story. I wish that was an aspect of magic that JKR explored more. The sea serpant sounds quite scary though it was probably less intimidating after they killed it.

I'm a bit surprised the muggles didn't react more to the magic. though maybe they were just greatful for being saved.

The narration in this is just perfect. I hope you do a podcast of this story because it was meant to be read aloud.

Yuna has quite the interesting back story. you do a great job making character so rich that I could read a story just about them to learn more.

ooh! He's French!!

I doubt this will surprise you, but I giggled at his comment regarding wand size.

every time I extend my left hand to my husband he asks if I have a weapon in my right (it's also a thing I guess).

hmm, having Peakes try to slay the sea serpant could be interesting. I'm kind of creeped out by Peakes' service too - maybe that's what he did with Yuna! (because Peakes is a bad guy in my head)

It's exciting to have the sword of Gryffindor in the story!! I wonder how Peakes got it.

I was wondering if he'd get in trouble for doing magic in front of muggles - I can't wait to see how things pan out with Cadmus.

Again you're showcasing brilliant story telling and flexibility with your writing style and narrative prose!

Can't wait for more


Author's Response: Hi Rose! Ah, no worries. And opening a consulting firm sounds pretty cool! :P I'm sorry for taking so long with this response! :)

I'm glad you liked the feel of a bedtime story! I had a lot of fun - though it was a little challenging - imagining how his voice might sound.

Yes, I actually got some of the information from the hp lexicon. I imagined them being quite similar to any other wild animal, though there might be more to this magical creature than it seems...

Haha, but it must have smelled so delicious to the serpent at least...

I agree, I really like the idea of dark and light and how magic has dangerous sides. Yes, the creature would be very terrifying especially for the poor Muggles in their boats!

Yeah, I imagined that after being nearly eaten by the serpent they would be a little shell-shocked but happy to be alive. :P His actions do come with consequences though, we get to see how he deals in the next chapter. :)

Ah, I love the idea of this being a podcast! My voice is probably too girly and young and Canadian to do it justice, but maybe I could find somebody who could do it better. :) That would be so cool!

I'm glad you liked Yuna! I really like her as a character, especially since he likes her a lot more than he likes most other people. He's a bit of a hater sometimes. :P

Haha, it does not surprise me at all that you giggled. :P I feel like I might have subconsciously been thinking of you and how you could appreciate it when I wrote it.

Haha that's funny! I've never thought of that but it makes sense, maybe from the medieval times and hiding weapons?

Peakes is a bit of a bad guy here. :P He is really creepy but does what he has to in order to survive.

I'm so glad you're asking quesitons and wondering about what is going to happen! :) this is making me more excited to get the next chapter up.

Aw, thank you! :) I'm so glad you think I'm showing flexibility with my writing. That's one of my goals for this year.

Thank you for the amazing review! :D

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