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Review:marauderfan says:
Hello! I love the way you did the narration here, as he tells a story to his great-great (etc) grandchildren. It feels like he is right there telling the story - and it's fantastic that he keeps getting distracted or questioning his memory or adding that werewolves aren't scary or making jokes that would potentially be inappropriate had he not remembered how old his audience was lol. I really like the way the storyis told - the perfect amount of distraction in there for a tale that he's probably told 4637465 times.

I have a feeling the narrator must be Nicholas Flamel. If he arrived in England in 1700 and was already old then, and seems to have seen a number of centuries including what seems like the wars against Voldemort... and I seem to remember Flamel's wife being called Perenelle, or Nellie. I like that you didn't say it outright, though. For the first half of the chapter I was really curious who he was and enjoyed thinking about it.

Ooh, that ring isn't the resurrection stone/future Horcrux, is it? Heh, knowing you and your tendency to slip sneaky details like that in your stories, it probably is :p

I like that Flamel's reasoning for Peakes' weirdness is an imbalance in the humours, quite appropriate to the time - and I love that many years/centuries later, Flamel still thinks of this as a possibility. Old habits die hard.

This is such a great start! I am really eager to read the rest of the story. Thanks for the swap :)

Author's Response: Hello! :)

Ahh, thank you! This story is probably one of the stranger things I've written and I was quite nervous about it, so it's really amazing to get your lovely feedback. I'm glad you like the voice and his little asides, and of course his jokes. :P I had a lot of fun playing with the style of the narration.

Hmm, that's a good guess! :P I'm glad you liked the mystery of it - I felt that it was right not to state it out loud since the kids already know who he is, so he wouldn't need to introduce himself. It was one of the funny little quirks about the very personal narration.

Hehe, interesting thought about the ring. :P I like how you understand my sneakiness. :P

Haha yes! Flamel was an alchemist too and I imagine him as being quite old-fashioned in some ways. He's a lot of fun to write.

Thanks for the brilliant review, I'm glad you like it so far! :) I'm going to try and have the next chapter up soon, a large chunk is already written. Thanks so much! :D



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