Oh my gosh, I LOVED this chapter! Seriously, your writing style is so beautiful. I get caught up in the story and you pull me along, weaving a intricate web of both physical and mental description. I thought that Scorpius' reaction to his grandfather's death was extremely well written and his pain was almost palpable. I felt for Rose the entire time she was babbling/afraid of babbling, because I've been in that position too and you wrote it extremely well. Al and Lizzy's relationship added some humor to what would have otherwise been a very heavy emotional chapter, and I thought the contrast between the events made them that much more poignant. I did think it a little strange that no clues were dropped prior to this incident but I think that because A. Rose, the narrator, was distracted by her own boy problems, and B. Al and Lizzy's relationship was what seemed to be a new event it is understandable that we didn't know anything about it prior.
And then there's the love scene. Oh my gosh. You have no idea how much I loved that ENTIRE scene. The struggle, the emotion, the pain, the longing... you expressed it so beautifully. My heart was crying for Scorpius and Rose. And then, when Scorpius shattered Rose's heart just after she had so lovingly given it to him... I wanted to cry.
So, what I think I want to say is: Thank you. I'll never be able to look at Sco/Rose the same way again, and I love every sentence of your writing. You write the characters like they're real, describe the scenes like I'm walking through the halls of Hogwarts, and paint the character's emotions and thoughts so vividly. Emotions are the aspect of writing I have the most trouble with, so reading your piece helps me understand how to change my own writing. Thank you. (Reading over this makes me sound like I'm just gushing for the sake of gushing, but I promise you I mean everything I say. You are a beautiful writer. One who happens to be writing one of my favorite ships. :D)
Author's Response: Oh my gosh.
Seriously. I don't know what to say.
You have literally rendered me speechless.
(And that is quite a feat, let me tell you.)
Okay how about this: screw Scorpius. You are officially the love of my life :P.
AH THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU SO SO MUCH! That still doesn't seem like enough, but I hope it sufficiently expresses my feelings.
I logged in today, saw a review from you, and smiled, because your last few reviews were absolutely lovely: sweet and constructive, just like a review should be.
But then I saw THIS and I almost cried of happiness! You made me look at my own writing in a new light; up until now, I've just been a voracious reader, an English nerd and someone who was decent at stringing words together. But you made me feel like an author, for the first time on my life. Thank you.
I don't think I deserve any of your wonderful praise, but I'm so ridiculously ecstatic that you think this about my writing. I really hope I continue to meet your expectations!
Again, I can't say it enough: thank you. From the bottom of my heart.