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Review:Angela says:
I have made the resolve to leave an actual review for this chapter, so we'll see if I can make it through this without dissolving into meaningless praise and pleas for you to update.

I really enjoy this story. That being said, I sometimes find it hard to keep tr-ack of the timelines. For example, at the beginning of the chapter, I had no clue what time period it was. However, I feel as I should also mention that your flashes to present day are always well-handled with just enough revelations to keep me on the edge of my seat (albus' death before the war was an interesting twist. I'd like to see where it goes).

Characterization is spot-on for everyone (pertaining to your story line, of course. Not canon.)and your use of dialogue to convey the story line creates very vivid images for me.

I am consumed with hatred and empathy for Albus and Rose and I would like to see more of the plot holes filled in, but I convinced you are writing this in a deliberate way so that when the reader finishes reading, he or she will finally understand everything. (that was such a run-on sentence, sorry.)

To conclude this, I would like to say that you are very obviously a terrible person (for making such a beautiful story in which pretty much every one will die) and the very-VERY best Next-Gen writer I've seen in awhile. I hope my review made Albus a happy boy (as if) and Scorpius shows up soon (he's such a sweetheart).

Author's Response: As much as we writers love our meaningless praise and pleas to update, reviews like THESE really take the cake. Thanks so much :)

When I write, I'm never really sure of the reader's perspective, so thank you for bringing confusion to my attention. I think I'll leave an Author's note about the time period in this and future chapter(s).

OH YES. Half the story is figuring out what the heck is going on. All the holes is deliberate. I've had most (if not all) of the plot points mapped out very accordingly and intend to resolve them in as shocking a manner as possible. The difficulty, of course, is deciding how much is TOO much to give away.

The story was written with the end in mind, I promise ;)

Hatred and empathy. Awesome combo. It tells me I've done a successful job characterizing them.

I know, I know, I'm a terrible person haha. But rest assured, MR. WALKER SHALL LIVE (I don't think I'm giving anything away by saying that haha.


Scorp comes back next chapter. The reunion wil be epic haha.



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