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Review:maraudertimes says:
Hi!

This certainly was such a cute little thing, but there are a few things I need to address:

First, Victoire should be in fifth year if she's 15. If you absolutely have to be 11 before being accepted into Hogwarts as a first year (which is true), you absolutely have to be 12 to be in second year, 13 to be in third year, and 16 to be in sixth year. Just a little thing.

Also, I feel as though Victoire is really wishy-washy. She starts off seemingly hating Teddy (well, she doesn't want anyone to know that she likes him and she doesn't agree to go on a date with him), but then she goes and says she loves him. I know that teenagers are emotional and impulsive, but saying I love you that quickly? Personally (so feel free to ignore me), it seems extremely rushed.

Other than that though, it was really cute. I loved Victoire's little step backs whenever she says Teddy is cute/hot/sexy/etc. It was really funny to see and it seems like exactly what someone in her position would do!

I also completely loved how James made an appearance at the end. It's a little mirror of what happened in the epilogue of sorts in DH, so that little canon mirror imaging was really cute and really helped lend an aura of realness to the story!

Also, the eyes? They sound gorgeous. The description was really nice there and I think you wrote it beautifully!

Great job!
Lo:)

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