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Review:MargaretLane says:
*grins* Well, there was a reference to Lily and Hugo discussing what houses they'd be in when they finally get to Hogwarts, so I think a lot of people have guessed him to be around Lily's age. I don't think his age has been officially clarified though.

And isn't it so hard to write summaries for sequels without giving stuff away. I have all the pronouns as "they" in the summary for The Rise of the A.W.L. so as not to reduce the number of suspects or anything.

Love the line, "the trees were like soldiers, guarding him."

Hmm, it sounds like Cho isn't as bad as she initially seemed. She doesn't want to harm Albus anyway, but she believes more people will die if he doesn't. That's intriguing.

Putting "something could have just snapped in her" on a separate line to what Harry says beforehand makes it a bit confusing. It sounds as if it's somebody else speaking. It would be better to put it directly afterwards. And there should also be a full stop/period after "said Harry."

Author's Response: Thanks for your wonderful review

Yes I think I'll check how old the people in the book are and maybe change it. I didn't think that it mentioned his age though, I guess people just have to make it up.

I find that as well. It is hard to write the summaries without giving anything away. I didn't really want anyone to even look at Albus Potter and the Lost Riddle if they have not read the Sapphire of Slytherin because it will give the whole plot away. Especially the first sentence 'Albus has just died' .

I liked that line too. It's a simile.

Yes that was Ying who was telling her to do bad. I made her sound very bad so it was suspicious by when you get to know her with the 'flashback' you get a different opinion.

Yes that mistake where I put the speech on the wrong line will be corrected. I have already corrected my other chapters with a few of the fab suggestions that you made and they are just waiting to be validated. In the meantime viewers will just have to read the old versions.

I am trying to keep all my stories as recently updated as possible because that way people don't have to wait.

Thanks for your support
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HEG
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