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Review:MargaretLane says:
*grins* My thought was right. You WERE leading up to something interesting with McGonagall's speech.

I think you have Peeves completely in character here. That sounds just like him.

I do think, however, that things are a little rushed here. We seem to jump from McGonagall's speech to Peeves to the password. I think the prefect would probably say a bit more than that Peeves is a mischief maker and the password is this. He'd probably welcome them to Gryffindor and maybe tell them a bit about the school or show them where their dormitories are or something. Or even just remind them to be sure and check what the password is when it changes and to take care not to forget it or they'd be locked out.

*grins* That makes a lot of sense, that Harry wouldn't have talked about winning the Triwizard Tournament, since we know he felt he didn't deserve it AND it must bring back pretty awful memories for him.

Hmm, I wonder where Scorpius is and how he knows about the Room of Requirement. I guess Draco could easily have told him, but it seems a little odd he'd go there immediately.

And then there's the house elf. I wonder what he is doing on Albus's bed. I almost didn't notice how mysterious that was because I was too busy wondering about Scorpius's absence. Maybe it's really the elf that is important and the thing with Scorpius is meant to distract us. Or maybe both are important. Hmm.

I am wondering how come Hugo is in first year. Are he and Rose twins in this as well? Or is she not in Albus's year?

Author's Response: Hello.
Fisrtly thank you for your great review. I make make a few amendments to the Prefect's speech as yes, he doesn't say much does he?

The bit about the room of requirement you will have to wait a bit to find out what happens about that.!!!

thank you for saying about I got Peeves completely in character, I thought that that was quite a good speech.

Rose and Hugo. I thought that they were twins; are they not? Or does no one know? I didn't think that it was revealed in the book.

Thanks,

HEG :-)


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