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Review:SkyEcho says:
Hey!!

What a great start :) I think your beginning really captured what it is to be 11. As wonderful as Hogwarts is, sometimes it's easy to forget that these first years are 11 years old...and they're off to a boarding school. You did an excellent job showcasing all of those conflicting nervous emotions through Melanie. I already like her. What I found particularly moving was seeing her question her father's beliefs while using the term, Mudblood - it shows her strength of character and mind, while also subtly reminding us that she is 11 and innocent to a lot of the darker meanings behind what she hears at home.

Now, this may sound odd, but prior to reading this, I hadn't really given much thought to the emotions and pressures these children would be faced with prior to the sorting ceremony. So thank you for exploring an area that is making me think! lol - You've done a fantastic job of showing just how overwhelming it is to make such a big choice - especially when the Houses are so tied to representing personal traits... The anxieties and confusion and insecurities around the characters regarding where they'll be placed felt really authentic.

Your shift in time was seamless and it was wonderful to see the younger versions of the characters we all know so well. It was cute to see James trying so hard with Lily and her having none of it haha.

Melanie is interesting and likeable. I found it refreshing to see Slytherin portrayed from a different angle. I'm so happy I happened across this story because it instantly grabbed my attention and I can't wait to find out all about Melanie's adventures at Hogwarts :)

Author's Response: Eee, thank you so much for such a wonderful review!

I am so glad you like Melanie as a character so far and think she seems like a 11 year old with all her confused feelings about going off to Hogwarts for the first time and being sorted. I am so glad they al seem realistic! I'm glad you picked up on that about the Mudblood thing too, that's exactly what I was going for, openminded but a bit sheltered.

That's wonderful to hear about the time jump too, that it was seamless. Ah thank you! I'm glad you liked James and Lily in there too, they are a lot of fun to write ;)

I am thrilled that you find the POV refreshing and that you're excited to read more! I am so happy you enjoyed it. This review really made my day! Thank you so much ♥ ♥ ♥


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