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Review:MargaretLane says:
Not being a fan of Churchill, I'm inclined to feel his saying that is appropriate. *laughs*

Love the introductory paragraph.

And i like the way you have elves magic in tune with nature. You've created a nice difference between their magic and wizards', while at the same time making it clear their magic DOESN'T exist just for the purposes of serving wizards.

I love the general idea of this, as it points out that the assumption that loving to serve in in elves' nature is just wizards' impression and obviously they have reasons for wanting to promote that point of view.

I'm wondering about the betrayal, if Hufflepuff will betray her. Not much like Helga is supposed to have been if he does, but then there is no reason to believe people are like their relatives.

Hmm, I don't like his assertion that sometimes it's necessary to strike first. That could be used to justify all sorts of evil - "we did it in case they MIGHT do something to us if we didn't."

That part about Winifred keeping Hufflepuff as a pet is both disturbing and ironic considering what we know about how wizards will pretty much treat magical creatures, at best, as pets. The "good" wizards seem to see them that way; even Hermione believes they need to be "taught what's best for them."

It's also interesting how they fear her taking his wand, even though her magic is already more powerful than what he could do with his wand. It shows how wizards already have an inherant assumption of superiority in that they assume all other creatures want what they have.

And that makes sense - that Hufflepuff's rather disturbing views about attacking others in case they'd a attack you is the result of his nearly having been killed. It doesn't make it OK - as Winifred said, it's unfair to blame all Muggles for what some did - but it does make it understandable.

I really like the way you show the breach occurring and make both characters' behaviour understandable. It makes sense that he would have anger towards a man who harmed wizards and tried to harm him, but on the other hand, it makes sense that she would not want somebody harmed no matter what he had done. And I agree with her that "brute force is not power." An Irish hero, Terence McSwiney once said, "it is not those who can inflict the most but those who can suffer the most who will conquer."

Excellent first chapter.

Author's Response: I thought the quote would fit well with the chapter - I'm glad you thought so too!! I'm rather neutral when it comes to Churchill - it was just his words I liked here. :D

I was slightly inspired by Dune for the first paragraph. In style, not content.

When I started this, it was a bit difficult to decide how elves were pre-enslavement. Then I remembered how magical blockers that would impact wizards, wouldn't impact house elves. That got me down the path of their magic being fundamentally different.

Countering a widely held assumption by wizards was a main goal of mine for this. I got inspiration for the idea that wizard's would have their own view of history when Ron, Harry, and Hermione argued about whether goblins were really mistreated by wizards. That's also what put me in mind of the Churchill quote.

Hywell is much different than Helga (who is either his dauther or niece). I'm glad you're able to see that not all family members are the same. I haven't decided if Hywell is a bad seed from a good family or if Helga is an anomoly from her family.

That assertion is key for his actions in the near-ish future. I can't write out how he goes about it (it's against the ToS) but he does strike first.

I was definitely aiming for ironic with parts of the narrative. While Winifred was jesting about the idea (which she saw as quite ludicrous) it did sew a seed in Hywell about a threat from elves.

Fear for his wand is really central to his overall issues with elves after this. The idea that these rather powerful creatures can do magic regardless of a magical instrument throws his own dependence on a wand into sharp relief.

I thought it'd be necessary to have some explanationf or Hywell's rather abrupt views. He did take the event with the muggles to an extreme in terms of post-traumatic stress.

I'm really glad you like that scene! Their argument was the point I built up to over this chapter. I love your quote from Terence McSwiney!

Thank you for such a lovely review!! I'll PM you when the next chapter is up.


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