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Review:Kinnu says:
Hey,

I liked the way you wrote the story but if you don't mind me saying, I would have liked it better if you would have offered a little more about Harry slipping out of bed or leaving the Burrow, where I think he's staying( it's what I deduced anyway...). If the point of your one-shot is to make it short and sentimental, ignore me!

I liked your description of the graveyard and your attention to details. I could picturise it well in my head.

One more thing, again if you don't mind me saying, as a reader, I found your story to have an extra adverb. The 'looking keenly ahead' would have sounded better to me without the 'keenly'.

Keep writing! Looking forward to reading your other stories,

Kinnu

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks a lot for reading and reviewing.

Thank you so much for your suggestions. If I decide to revamp it, I'll definitely take them into consideration. For now, I want to keep this short and sentimental though =)

I am pleased you liked the description and details as that was my aim.

Thanks for that little grammar thing. I'll go back and edit.

Thank you once again for your lovely words!


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