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Review:Pixileanin says:
Hello! You have obviously been busy, so I popped over to see what's up.

First off, I love that Audrey can't remember the intern's name, and she frets over it. And then it's him!! That made me laugh so much! Someone who was so notorious in that "other world" is so unknown to her. Brilliant!

Your Audrey is really likeable here. She's witty and unsure of herself, and best of all, she "er"s like a pro! I also like this Verity person, from what I've seen of her. She's so colorful, and just as long as she doesn't curse my family back generations, I think I will continue to like her. And she's setting up Audrey! Perfect!

Drunk George was funny too, when he opened the door. I loved this:

"Circulating, running around in circles..."

I really like the first impression of Percy, now that you ask. He's just the right amount of suffering and insanely nose-in-the-air that I like to remember him by. And I really loved Audrey's come-back. She doesn't pull punches, that one.

You have some fantastically fascinating characters in this story of yours. The first chapter was a breeze to read, so entertaining and full of color. (I think I said that before, but it's true. So colorful. Like a rainbow of happy/not-so-happy personalities that have come together to clash and create problems for each other.) That's how great stories start, I think.

Such a fun opening!

Pix

Author's Response: Pix! Thanks so much for all of these reviews, they were such a wonderful surprise and meant so much to me :D

Haha, Audrey isn't always up to date on current events so it's almost natural she forgets Death Eaters names :P

I'm so glad that you liked Audrey and Verity, I always dread creating OCs (even if Audrey isn't really one) as there's so much fear of them becoming Mary-Sues, so hearing this was fantastic! It's probably a good idea to continue liking Verity just to prevent it from happening as you never know with her!

Haha, drunk George was surprisingly fun to write because I always imagined he would be rather different.

I'm glad you liked Percy because while I wanted him to be as he was in the books, I didn't want him to be the stereotypical boring person either. Though I guess Audrey is certainly a match for him...

I'm so glad that you liked the opening as we both know how much pressure and angst they can cause writers with all the anticipation they carry. Ooh, I love the rainbow analogy and I think it might be my favourite comment of the story so far!

Thanks for such a fantastic review, Pix, I hope to get to the other reviews asap too!

-Kiana


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