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Review:Kinnu says:
Hey,

I absolutely love your writing style. The descriptions of events and places are so vivid I can picture them in my head. I can see Snape and Pettigrew and the expressions that go along with what they say. How do you do it? (I'm horrible at describing the setting...)

If you don't mind me saying though, I thought Pettigrew was mostly out of character. I mean, according to the story, he's not all that brave and he sure doesn't have the brains to strike a deal with someone so sneaky and intelligent as Severus. Maybe thinking Severus is clever and Pettigrew is stupid is just me... If it is and the point of your story is to show that Pettigrew can dig up some courage, ignore me!

As for Severus, your portrayal of him was totally Canon and believable. I could relate to the time frame you mentioned too!

One more thing though. Maybe you should describe the Pettigrew coming to Spinner's end part in the beginning. Because I half-understood it somewhere in the middle when they mention it and totally understood it in the Author's note you put up.

Other than that, awesome.

Looking forward to reading more of your stories,

Kinnu

Author's Response: Hi, there.

Thanks for the compliments on my writing style. I don't normally write in first person, so it's good to hear that it worked well for you.

I've always found the movie portrayal of Peter to be a little at odds with the way the books made me think of him. I can't imagine he was as much of a sniveling coward as the movies made him out to be. It took a certain kind of courage to make the choices he made, even if they were indefensible. And while Peter *thinks* he's getting the best of Snape, that obviously wasn't the case.

I really enjoy writing Snape, as long as it's not in some situation where he's pining over Lily.

I wanted to keep things rather mysterious at the beginning, to help the reader get into the same mental groove as Peter. He's quite lost and has no idea what's going on or where he is.

I'm glad that you enjoyed it. Thanks for reading and reviewing!


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