Hi! This story looked super interesting, so I read it. And now I'm going to give you a review. :)
So, I've read a lot of 800 words of heaven's work--she's a brilliant author, and you are, too. Don't be too hard on yourself if you think that you didn't quite get the style right. After all, we've each got our own styles, and no matter how hard we try, we'll never be able to perfectly mimic someone else's. I, for one, think that you did a remarkable job.
Psychological problems in fanfiction always fascinate me. Here in the world of Next Generation Harry Potter stories, with pregnancies and parties and sex galore, people sometimes forget about the what ifs: What if someone's "fatal flaw" (so to speak) was something inside of their head? What if the problem got carried a bit too far? What if...?
Molly's characterization is absolutely brilliant. She has a sense of humor, as evidenced by her line at the end. She knows that what she's doing is destructive, but she can't stop and it would seem that she doesn't really want to stop. I find it incredibly interesting that she "did do it for the attention." I've never battled OCD or anything like that, so I don't know how it feels or why people do it, really, except that their minds are telling them to. Why did Molly need the attention that she wasn't getting? Was she jealous of her "annoying" family members?
I also think it's cool that you chose Molly. Molly is Percy's kid--uptight, borderline megalomaniac Percy--so it makes a lot of sense that she, too, would have obsessive tendencies. Thinking about her as the "obsessive compulsive" child rather than the "smart, bookish, strict, old maid-ish" child really turns everything upside down. You've created an incredibly compelling character, so well done! :D
My favorite part about this one-shot is how it starts with water and it ends with water--just like Molly's problem. So, in essence, with her joke she's actually talking about the story as well as her problem. ...I don't know, I just think that's really cool.
Fabulous work! :)
Author's Response: Hello! Super sorry for the super late response! ♥
Aw, really? :( I thought I couldn't do her style at all... She wrote happy stories and I wrote tihs weird ting. My main thing for her style was using short phrases, but I do that all the time :P
I love what ifs as well :) Super fun to read!
I'll be honest, I never meant for it to be about the attention. That was actually supposed to be, "I didn't do it for the attention." But, because I didn't want it to go against ToS and stuff, I changed it. I originally wanted her to just... get obsessed with it, and for her to find enjoyment o.O (I AM WEIRD I KNOW)
Thanks, I've always wanted to write about Molly and Lucy! Lucy one day, I hope ♥
Aw, thank you. I never meant it to be that wya, but you saw it like that and it makes me feel super smart!
I really appreciate it and sorry for the horribly late review ♥