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Review:Violet Gryfindor says:
If last chapter made me flail, then this one is pure asdfghjkl because oh my gosh the flashbacks to the kiss and the secret hand-holding under the table and the glances across the room and wow. So far this is the kind of romance that makes a person melt from the chair. Can they like stop being so cute?

I've never seen the secret-romance type story written so sweetly and fluffily. It's almost funny how no one around them is noticing that anything is going on between them - you'd think the romantic feels would be radiating through the air at this point. But at the same time, it makes sense that no one notices because it suggests that no one in Molly's family thinks that any romance between them would be possible - it's so out of the question that it's beyond their wildest imaginings. That makes me worry what would happen once they do know about this relationship. Would they assume that Oliver is taking advantage of Molly? (Though it's very clear from the reader's perspective that he's not.) I really like how, when Molly is worrying, it's not about her family or other people's opinions - she worries about herself, thinking through her attraction to this man, what it means and how it affects her. That says a lot about her personality and her independence. She stands out from the Weasleys in more ways than simply her appearance.

It's also great to see you including Roxy and Dominique in fairly prominent roles, rather than the usual set of younger cousins, and that Molly's relationship with them and her sister is positive. They're all close, but not too close - just comfortable friends and cousins who support and accept Molly, even if she is different from them. It'll be interesting to see how her relationship with them is affected by her relationship with Oliver - I think they'll continue to support her, or rather I hope that they do (it'll be most awkward with Lucy, of course - "sorry I'm dating your boss?").

There are a couple of little things: "envelope" instead of "envelop", and some of the narration that accompanies dialogue makes it less clear who's speaking. One example is with the lines “Enjoying yourself?” Molly took another sip of her drink and nodded. / “Yes. And you?” Oliver smiled, filling a glass for himself as well.. I know that Oliver asks whether she's enjoying herself, but by putting Molly's name beside it, it's less clear. Does that make sense?

This is my favourite of the two chapters because you wrote the romance so well here, including just the right details - the little things like the way he doesn't let go of her hand at the end. It's perfect. ^_^ Great work on this story! I'll be on the lookout for an update.

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