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Review:Violet Gryfindor says:
This is fantastic! There are a number of really cutting-edge stories being posted lately, and this is definitely one of the best - imagine writing about James's parents! As rival journalists! This is going to be a very fun story to follow, and it's going straight-away on my favourites list. :D

A lot of what makes this story work so well is the energy that radiates from every line, each of the characters emerging fully-formed. I could imagine the scene clearly in my head, though you never allowed the descriptions to overwhelm the story - you instead focus on the action, the sharp dialogue, and Andy's determination. The latter of these is another key point for this story. Andy is a brilliant character, and it's great to come across a story where the characterization of an OC comes across so strongly in the first chapter. Those first paragraphs bring her to life with all the little details you include about her and Corrine. I was reminded of Bel and Lix from "The Hour", fighting against misogyny and working hard to deliver the best news.

The dialogue in this story stands out. You've captured a mid-twentieth century feel quite effectively - I love that kind of attention to detail in a period piece. And it gives the characters that much more personality too.

I'm looking forward to seeing how you develop this story. It will be interesting to see what Glenn Potter is like, whether he'll be the same kind of newsman as Desmond and Turner, and if not, what will make him stand out from the crowd. What kind of scoop does he really have with that crazy headline? How will Andy react to him, and how will their relationship develop? Even more so, however, I look forward to seeing how Andy makes her place in this world and proves that she's the best journalist at the Prophet. Excellent work with this first chapter! :D

Author's Response: Hi Susan!

Wow, thank you! I'm really pleased you think so. This idea just popped into my head and James' parents just seemed like the perfect characters for the era I wanted to write.

I'm actually really pleased you think that because, to be honest, I just wrote this whole chapter in one sitting. The ideas just came to me, so I'm glad you think the characters are good so far. Attention to detail is always the best thing! I study history currently, so I'm a bit of a stickler for historical detail. So, I'm pleased you appreciated that.

Well, I hope I've kept you intrigued enough to see just how Glenn Potter will turn out and how the crazy headline they have will work!

Thanks very much and thank you for reviewing!

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