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Review:toomanycurls says:
Review swap!!! I think you read my mind - I was going to post a review swap post. :)

This was quite the chapter for sorrow! :( You write Verity's grief is a way that pricks at my own grief exerpeinces which makes me feel you've done an extremely good job bringing her to life. I love how her thoughts float in and out of the narrative. That detail gave the chapter a slightly unfocused feel that deep loss can bring about.

Her identification as a collector of memories and ghosts was quite a chilling image for this chapter given how she's remembering Penelope and their friendship. The story she collects from the old man is quite fascinating. I wonder what power/use she finds in them to pay such a premium to know something so personal. Having Verity say her story begins where Penelope's ends is a beautiful way of showing how interconnected they were as friends.

Oh but inappropriat stories always come out at funerals. I think it's quite endearing that she recalls the story of them skinny dipping. Just a guess - was it one of the Weasley twins that tried to clap? I imagine that Dumbledore's gaze would be a bit steadying at a funeral. I can't imagine how it would be as muggles to have a witch daughter who was killed by magic. The horror it must have inspired in them...

I really liked her background information on Sebastian and the hints that he may not be as fond of muggles/muggleborns as others. His thoughts that being a pureblood or at least halfblood makes them immune from Death Eather trouble is quite believable and shows why so many are indifferent to the rise of Voldemort or his followers.

You've created such a fascinating story! I'm excited to see how Verity becomes entwined with Fred and George. Your use of imagery in this is uniquely beautiful and slightly haunting. I look forward to reading more!

-Rose

Author's Response: Hello! :)

Ah, this chapter was very sorrowful. :( I promise the story gets a little happier, though there is that dark undertone throughout. I'm glad you found her grief realistic, and the way her thoughts seemed unfocused. That is a little the way Verity's head works regardless, but it was definitely accentuated by her grief and confusion.

Chilling is just what I was hoping for! Due to her personality and line of work Verity is quite the collector. I see her as a very good listener who doesn't like to talk much about herself, unless it's in her own head. She has a very good memory and is very observant, unlike characters like Sebastian who are more self-centered in a way.

I'm glad you found the funeral believable, and I thought it was sweet though quite sad as well. Ah, yes, Dumbledore would be quite reassuring. I know, I feel so sorry for Penelope's parents and how horrific it would be since they have no real way of protecting their daughter or themselves from powers they don't understand.

I'm glad you liked the portrayal of Sebastian as well. He's quite an interesting character for me to write since Verity knows him so well and they know all about the other's bad qualities which are brought to light. Sebastian isn't evil by any means, but he is a lot less binary good-or-evil as Harry and his friends. :P I like your explanation of being indifferent about Voldemort, and how people could have not wanted to get involved if they weren't directly being targeted. I imagine that would have been the case with many.

I'm so glad you like it so far, and are asking questions! :) I've recently sorted out some confusion I had with this story and have been working on it, so it's lovely to see your thoughts on it. Thanks so much for the amazing review! :D


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