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Review:mcdash says:
Oooh, loved this chapter! The pacing was wonderful, as well as the dialogue between character. It all feels very natural and works well.

Thierry's plans are very strange. I'd love to learn more about Piper, because while he's said that she would twist his words, it just seems too fishy. I do like the set up however, especially since we'll get to see Alicia ~in action. Thirty-seven hours is such a small window, but I can't wait to see her do it.

I'd love to see more of Alicia and Nick's relationship. Even though Nick's gotten into trouble with the law before, he seems like a good person, and it's apparent why Alicia is still friends with him. I like how he has limits to what he'll do, like putting Molly before the agency. Also, Alicia's confrontation with Roxanne sounds like it's going to very interesting. I love the last line of the chapter:

It's time to eat some humble pie.

This was a great second chapter, looking forward to the next one!

Author's Response: Oooh thank you! I'm really glad that you still like this novel!

Thierry's plans are indeed strange, but I think Alicia's more interested in the money to call him out on it. We do see Piper in chapters five and six :D Thirty-seven hours is a small window indeed, but if anyone can do it, it's her.

I'll definitely try to incorporate more of Nick into this story, since he's such a popular character. I don't know how right now, but I'll definitely do my best to fit their backstory into later chapters :) Hehehehe, thank you! ^.^

The third chapter is in the queue right now! Thank you for reviewing! :)

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