Hello! Doing our review swap!
I'm quite enthralled with the way you write Sirius' apprehension in visiting Regulus' room. I love the build up and resolution of tension as he summons his (Gryffindor!) courage to barge in. I found his obersvation that Barty and Regulus are as close (physically and perhaps relationally) as Sirius and his friends quite interesting. I wish that he'd use that to relate to his brother a bit more.
I love the awkward brother talk! I mean, Sirius is trying so hard to connect and getting stone-walled by Regulus.Oh how I wish he'd opened up.
Lucius is wonderfully slippery and carries himself with the perfect amount of arrogance and power. I like that Barty doesn't cower to Lucius as so many do. I'm quite dying to know what Barty's secrety is!
Narcissa's poised and refined behavior is extremely well characterized. She's always seemed quite savvy to the environment and how to respond accordingly. I wasn't expecting her to open up to Sirius but it's great that she did. I guess I can see how she'd be quite scared given the deaths, Barty's proclamations of death coming from them, and Reg's odd behavior.
This was an awesome chapter! I was a bit surprised that he was going to ask permission just to send a letter.
Author's Response: Hey there - thanks so much for dropping by, and thanks so much for the swap! :)
Ah, thank you so much! I wasn't sure if it was too much when I first wrote it - you know, if it was a bit ott - so I'm glad you liked it! And it's definitely Gryffindor courage - though not the kind which comes in a bottle ;) It's such a shame they can't connect with each other - but, hey, Sirius tried! Once, but he still tried! :)
It's incredibly awkward! It was a bit weird to write, tbh, since I had to try not to use 'awkward', 'silence', etc. ad nauseum :P But yeah, it's such a shame Regulus didn't say anything... ;)
I did enjoy writing that scene with Lucius! It was like David v Goliath, in my mind, haha, with Barty just throwing Lucius for a loop :D Ooh, Barty's secret... all will be revealed in the end ;)
Thank you! I'm so glad you liked Narcissa, since she's so different to the other family members, it's almost out of place, I think. But yeah, she's definitely poised and trying to be held together and all that jazz. Opening up to Sirius... it is an important moment - well, not quite a turning point, but still relatively important ;) But yeah, she's really scared with everything going on, definitely! Barty's proclamations of death - I really love that, haha! :)
Yeah, it's not so much permission to write a letter, it's more permission to perhaps say anything about what's going on, though I'm not sure that came across totally... might go back and look at it again - thanks for that! :)
Thanks so much for the review - it was really great to get! And thank you so much for the swap - I really enjoyed it! :)