Wow, this was an excellent chapter :) I really enjoyed many things.
I think what was amazing about this chapter and the way you wrote it were definitely the ideas. Especially the one about the will. I found that truly mysterious. You captured the Black family's minds, and the way they work so well -- how they were able to notice that the accounts for the will were tampered with. You made that cunning base of their characterization wonderfully! But this was in the first chapter, which I reread because it had been a while :P
That brilliant characterization really carried into this chapter as well. I loved Barty's exchange with Sirius. It was thrilling. My heart wants to say that Sirius didn't do it, but honestly at this point - everyone's fair game. I think Barty is definitely mysterious and probably suspect 1 for me, only because he isn't a Black and it seems weird for him to be there in the first place, if he didn't have a motive. He's also been very upfront with Sirius, and is trying to stir the pot.
I truly love Sirius is this. He's very nonchalant, and it's super different and cool to see him with this particular cast of characters, without James, Peter, or Remus. It truly adds to the mystery and darkness. Regulus is definitely creepy in more ways than one. Especially that gaze Sirius was talking about, and even Barty couldn't avoid and had to blurt something out. Very well written!
This part, was golden:
Briefly, he wonders what could have Mr I-have-peacocks-in-my-garden-didn't-you-know Malfoy looking like he was sucking a slice of lemon... -- HILARIOUS, TO BE HONEST. Sirius ♥ Love love love.
I love your description throughout. Especially when you add the little details of coughing portraits and literally everything adds to the dark essence of this story.
Bellatrix was true to her character -- wicked and she gave me the chills. Excellent work on her!
All in all, this was an excellent chapter! Everything was thrilling and engrossing, and truly well written. Brilliant work!
Author's Response: Hey there - thanks so much for dropping by! I really appreciate it! :)
Wow, thank you so so much for that! :) I'm so glad you liked it - I thought the will stuff would be a little dry, compared to some of the other, more dramatic things (you know, like murder and stuff :P), so I'm glad you like it! And thank you so much - I'm so happy you like the characters! I really enjoyed writing them and working out their relationships with each other! :)
Thank you again! I'm so happy you like Barty and Sirius - particularly Sirius, since I know it's not the same way people usually write him, I think. He's definitely a lot, cooler, I guess, with his family than his friends. Kinda trying to fit in, in a way? I think is fairly common, to act one way around your family, and differently around your friends, so Sirius kinda does that. He's kinda alone, but not, and it's so fun to explore! :)
Barty - honestly, I love writing him. He's just so unbelieveably funny and so great to write. He is kinda mysterious and definitely suspicious - but I promise you there is a reason why he's here! ;) Yeah, Barty has a tendency to blurt things out - but Regulus' stare... creepy little boy. Very creepy.
Mahaha, I loved writing that! At first I was worried it didn't quite fit, but I decided in the end to leave it in, so it's so great to hear you liked it! :)
Thank you! :D I know I tend to write a lot of description, so I'm glad you liked it and the details! :)
I love writing her... she's a little less mad, haha, but still scary! I'm so happy you thought she was true to character! :)
Thank you so so much for this amazing review - I've really struggled to find words to reply to it, haha! It was such a lovely thing to receive! Thank you again! :)