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Review:SkyEcho says:
Hi Unluckystar57!
Wow - I absolutely loved this! I have a huge soft spot for Neville - so when I saw that you had a Neville / Hannah story, I just had to read it. I enjoyed your portrayals of Neville and Hannah. Both are so real. Neville's characterization is spot on and Hannah's reflections of how the war changed her are so sad, yet incredibly understandable.
The only part that gave me a slight pause was when Hannah thinks about Neville before seeing him. If she had seen him first, or saw something that reminded her of him, it would help that part seem less random. Though with that being said, there is something romantic and fated about randomly thinking about him and then having him walk in... Perhaps adding Hannah's internal surprise at thinking of him at all (especially since he was "hardly a blip on her radar" when they were at school )?
Neville is so sweet. I couldn't stop smiling at his line, "You shine brighter than you know, Hannah." :) And I'm so happy that we got to see Hannah soften towards him. I know this is a one-shot, but you've definitely left me wanting more!
Thank you for doing the review swap with me - I am so happy that I found this story :)

All the best,
SkyEcho

Author's Response: Hi SkyEcho!!

I'm sorry that it took so many ages for me to respond to this lovely review, but I'm here now. :) Thanks so much for the swap!

I was actually a Neville/Luna shipper until I discovered fanfiction, and then writing Neville/Hannah became a sort of ambition of mine. I wanted to see what they would be like together. I'm so glad you thought that they seemed realistic!

Yeah, that part of the story is a bit iffy, and I can see the contradiction!! I might extend this story later on, and I'll definitely give that some thought. I think that there could be a newspaper headline about him or something--that would tie things in better! Thanks for the suggestion!

Awww, I love Neville. He's adorable, and his relationship with Hannah is beautiful, even though in this one-shot, it's only just begun. I actually kind of want more of this story myself! I might turn it into a short story or novella when I find the time. :)

Thanks for the awesome review!

~UnluckyStar57


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