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Review:luciusobsessed says:
Wow let me start off by saying you are an amazing writer! I love how you went about this.

All the character's are very true to themselves. I love the OC's you've added in. Gemma's extreme happiness is a perfect way of masking her terror, I really like how that was implied. I also love Sirius's cool demeanor.

James and Lily were PERFECT. The way they can switch from relationship talk to serious talk and back to relationship talk, it was lovely. I also love the cigarette piece. I like how Lily, who is this seemingly perfect role model, makes herself vulnerable with that cigarette. It really says a lot. Her explanation about the Death Eaters was very interesting to read. It reminded me a lot of Hitler and the Nazis, which now that I think about, are similar in term of their goals. I don't know if that was what you were going for, but I love how you related it back to Muggles, and especially that last bit when James asked Lily how the story ends.

It was a wonderful chapter. You are a very talented writer and I look forward to reading more of your writing xoxo luciusobsessed

Author's Response: Wow, what a long, lovely review!

I guess I should start out by saying that Gemma's extreme happiness isn't directly connected to the attack mentioned in this chapter. It has to do with her individual subplot/magical abilities, so if you decided to go back and read the entire story, you'll understand what I'm referring to ;)

I'm so so happy you like my version of James and Lily, though - I was really nervous that I wasn't writing them right! I always envisioned them to be the perfect role model couple once they finally got together, but I wanted to take this chapter to explore their fears and worries about the future. They did join the Order, so I figured they had serious conversations every once and awhile. And on that note, yes, the references to Hitler and the Nazis are intentional. I was a Political Science major in college, so I couldn't help but throw a little world history in there, because come on, Voldy probably got some ideas from him and Mussolini :D

Thank you so much for taking my requested review, I truly appreciate it!!

Carly


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