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Review:kenpo says:
So, I was just looking through my reviews to check for author responses, and I noticed that my review on this wasn't there. Sometimes my computer logs me out at the last second when I post, so I went onto here and saw... nope! I just completely neglected to post the review.

Luckily, though, I horde data, and I still had the review saved somewhere else! So, sorry for the delay, and here's the review!

Hey, here for the swap! Based on the summary, I'm really intrigued by this.

Uggh. Just by the first sentence... this is fantastic. I wish I could use description like you do!

although whether this aversion is out of respect or embarrassment, it is impossible to say.
I love this line. It not only does a great job showing how the family runs, and how much disconnect there is between the members of the family... but it's just a well written line, too!

It's hard to imagine a Bellatrix with just one stray curl:)

A pause, pregnant and expectant, and then Sirius pushes his chair back, hands in his pockets, striding off across the hall, heading for the doors
Gah, this entire paragraph was marvelous. I'm really fascinated by the Blacks

Whoops. Murder is bad. Oh, so sad. But I'm actually excited.

looking at her sister with a mocking, superior smile curling the corners of her lips.
Seriously, it's like every word you write is really carefully chosen. This is not only awesome description, but great for defining her character. And, again, you've added an element that shows how non-family-like this family is! I'm jealous.

Wait I've just noticed that this is in present-tense. You write the tense very well, it's easy for it to be awkward and choppy. My hat's off to you.

Your description of his death was so perfect! (That sounds so weird to say.) I've said it about twelve times, but one (or two or three) more won't hurt. This writing is fantastic.

Okay. This was so good. I'm so intrigued! Who did it? Was it one of them? One of the house-elves? Someone else?

I really wish I could write like this. The plot is already really interesting, but when you add in the way you use words, this was an absolute pleasure to read.

Author's Response: Hey there - thanks for stopping by! :) And no worries about it - it happens to me too sometimes! I think it's just the internet... still, no harm done!

Thank you so much! I'm glad you like it - I know I tend to use a lot of description, so I'm glad you think it's alright!

Haha, yeah, I know! But I figured that before Azkaban she would have had access to hair products and brushes and things, so there would be less manic hairdos... at least, I hope so :P

Oh, me too! I love them so much - I think they're one of the most interesting families on the whole series, if not the most, since we know so little, really, about who they were individually and collectively.

Haha, yeah, murder is bad ;) But I'm so happy you're excited! It's a good thing... er, I think? :P

Thank you! :) I did try to use the words carefully, so that there was some personality coming through in the description, as well, since there wasn't all that much dialogue and things to describe people and I wanted to distinguish the characters from each other from the beginning. So, yeah, it was intentional ;) But thanks! :)

I don't know how I started writing in present tense... it might just have been this which started it. But yeah, I quite like it! I'm glad it works for you! :)

Nah, it's not all that weird. I've definitely said weirder things while writing this ;) I'm glad you liked it, though - it was something I was a little unsure about putting in, so that's really great to hear!

Ooh, good ideas! I can't say anything of course, you'll have to wait and see - but good questions! :)

Thank you so so much for this wonderful review - I really loved receiving it, and I'm sorry it took me so long to respond! :)

Aph xx

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