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Review:AlexFan says:
I'm here with your fourth review! I'm doing this last one as I go so I'm scrolling up and down through the chapter.

The first thing that I noticed was that you said Ginny grabbed the books that she would need for the day and then headed down to the common room. But how can she know which classes she has on the first day if she doesn't have her schedule, which she got during breakfast? It's just something that I noticed.

It was so sweet of the older students to wait up for Ginny, I got the impression from the books that Ginny didn't really hang out with Harry's friends in the older grades but it's so nice everyone taking care of her anyway and making sure that she's safe. It's still so weird to think of a Colin as a Sixth Year, for some reason in my head I still remember him as that little kid that kept following Harry around when he was in his second year.

I think what Ginny is taking as Dean treating her like a child was just him being a gentleman. I hadn't expected her to get so angry with him for just opening the door for her. The boy was giving up his spare time just to make sure that Ginny got to class safely.

That punishment sounded brutal though, I felt so bad for Ginny. I honestly can't believe that they allowed whippings back as a form of punishments for students that were given detention. And by the sounds of it the Carrows didn't hold anything back when punishing Ginny.

“No one will hear you scream, but you can try if you like.” She let go and backed away, her haunting laugh echoing around the unforgiving dungeon. “Tie her up, Amycus. This is going to be fun.”

That part right there gave me the shivers. There were so many insinuations with the way that you left it off right there. It let your reader imagine a whole list of punishments that the Carrows could've had ready for Ginny. It's amazing how well the power of imagination works in the favor of authors in a story. You didn't even have to tell your reader's exactly what Ginny had to go through, you let us picture it in our heads.

Great job on the chapter!

Author's Response: Good point with the books! I'll have to go back and change that. I'm so glad that I asked you to read this one. Lol. It's been a bit since I worked on it, and I have big plans. +]

I figured that there had to be some bonds between them, I mean, not everyone was nice to Harry when he first started telling them all the truth, and now he's on the run. I'm sure he was happiest with Ginny, and it would've been obvious. Like you, I like the idea that they're looking out for her now that he can't.

Yeah, I feel bad for Dean. The way I figured, she was upset at everyone, and would most likely be more prone to take her frustrations out on him than anyone else.

The punishment. I figure, they know that Ginny knows whats up. They don't have to hold back on her to save face, and the twins most likely looked forward to trying to make sure she never wanted to cause a disturbance ever again.

I'm glad that you liked this chapter! Thank you so much for everything you've pointed out. Now I can go back and edit what I've got with some idea of what I'm doing. +] Haha!


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