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Review:Iellwen says:
Hey there, here for our review swap! :)

I had to read two chapters so you've definitely got an interesting story development!^^

I like that Harry's ended up with an OC and that they have a child together and that this is his story (kind of) but you didn't go through tedious descriptions and introductions.
Devlin is an interesting character right from the start though it's quite a shame you already announced he was being rescued (at the very beginning of the 1st chapter, in an A/N about him being 6 when captured then 9 when rescued). I guess that took some of the suspense out...?

I liked the very dramatic statement at the end of this chapter but, since it's the last line, this 'he died the moment he was stood before Voldemort.' stands out a bit and confused me ^^
I don't know if you meant the boy was placed in front of Voldemort or the moment he stood before him?
Maybe that's just me, though^^

During Geoffrey's memories scene you use italics, even for the actions "actual" Harry & Alex's actions and that broke my read's flow a bit. Again, maybe that's just me ^^

I'm looking forward to how they rescue him and how Devlin - sorry, Dubhan (did you choose a name often listed in various martyrologies on purpose?^^) grows up after that!

Cheers!

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