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Review:AlexFan says:
Hello, here for your second review.

I'll just start off with some CC that I noticed early in the chapter. The format of the story seems really cramped together and it makes it look a lot more daunting than it really is. Personally, I would suggest fixing the format to make it easier for future readers but you can definitely choose to ignore that. Another thing that I noticed was that you mentioned Ron was at home with dragon pox when really, he was "at home" with spattergroit which is completely different than dragon pox. And I also noticed that you wrote Ginny's name as "Ginerva" instead of "Ginevra," it's not a big thing but it's just something that you might want to fix if you're trying to keep the story as canon as possible.

I also wouldn't have expected Bellatrix to give up on torturing Ginny so quickly, even if Ginny doesn't know where Harry, Ron and Hermione are. I suppose though, Bellatrix realised that the trio wouldn't have told anyone where they were going specifically because of this reason.

But wow, they really get right down to punishing and torturing people these days at Hogwarts huh. I felt so bad for that little girl though, she sounded so tiny and I just felt really bad that someone had told her that she wasn't worth much just because of her blood status. I just hate to think that there were little children attending Hogwarts who might've actually been told that they weren't right or that they're less than someone else just because of their blood status. Can you imagine what that would do to a child? It was really great of Neville and Ginny and Colin to welcome her like that though, I wouldn't have expected any less of them.

But anyway, great chapter and I'm off to the next one!

Author's Response: Yay!! CC!! I've been waiting for some feedback like this, oh my gosh, thank you! I'll go back and reformat it so it's a little better paced. And I'm glad you pointed that out, both the spattergroit and the Ginevra, I prefer to be as close to canon as humanly possible, and I wrote this before I found out about Harry Potter wiki. Lol

I figured with Bellatrix, it was more of Ginny's insolence than looking for information. If since she fed her a story, if it was a lie, it could be followed up on with another torture session, and if it held up, why waste her time with a blood traitor? At least, that was my reasoning.

Yes. I wanted it to be immediately known that Hogwarts was going to be different. I figured that with the regime having taken over the ministry, their next step would be to brainwash the kids, kinda like this book I read when I was younger. (Really wish I could remember the name.) They already controlled the government body responsible for the well fare of children, and the adults were too busy being oppressed to storm Hogwarts and take back their kids. The most effective brainwashing would be on the first years. Get them to turn against each other, and take the fight out of those who would be abused when they're eleven and avoid a whole new generation of rebels later.

Yay! 2/4 good to go! Awesome.


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