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Review:maraudertimes says:
Hiya! Review swap!

Okay, so this was a mind-blowing first chapter. But before I get into that, I just noticed two typos:

""My wand is against you neck," Harry said, (...)" Your not you.
""Yes, you buried a body," the Death Eater said, "but not your sons."" Son's not sons.

That was it. The rest of it was amazing (although the spaces in the first half of the chapter made it a little difficult to read), and I was hooked as soon as little Devlin was introduced. He seemed like such a sweet little boy and he also seemed very strong to have not screamed even under the effects of crucio.

Then when Harry was being focused on, it was very hard to not choke up as we saw how much Harry loved his little boy and how much he missed him. The memory was just too much and it was both beautiful and sad at the same time.

The overall writing style in this chapter was very nice, and I'm curious as to what happened to Devlin Potter. He's such a sweetie, so I hope he'll be okay!

Great first chapter! It really gives the readers a hook!

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