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Review:tabula_rasa says:
I'm reviewing in retrospect, having been unable to stop myself from clicking on the 'Next Chapter' button till I had finished the whole story. That's how utterly brilliant and engrossing this was. I can't really express my admiration in terms of how this story takes a minor element from a major event and gives it flesh and blood. But I'll save all of that for when I review the last chapter.

Having just re-read this chapter, I was struck by how carefully it was constructed. The mundane quality of everyday gossip contrasted so well with Ettie's rebellious office, right down to the angry cabinet and the atmosphere. It was so brilliantly done, we were finding out things about Ettie not directly through her own thoughts but by the depth you lent to her surroundings. It was like a scene in a play where the whole set, props and all, are alive and pushing the story further, giving it more depth.

The interaction with Cho was a pleasure to read. It conveyed the instability of their relationship and the demise of their friendship without really overtly declaring the two. Their conversation progressed with that sense of something having died between them but not quite having left, like a dead body, slowly rotting but neither of them have the courage to remove it. It was good to see Cho with that because by refusing to acknowledging Ettie's existence entirely she would have become too unreal a character, she does cave in and go for coffee and it made the whole thing more real because people like to have their judgments known. The rat in the mail which followed was like the symbolic representation of their encounter.

I loved this chapter, there is no other way to put it. This is like reading my dream story. Marginal disliked character: check. Fantastic writing: check.

Author's Response: Hey there,

First, thank you so much for reading this fic to the end and for leaving me such lovely, thoughtful reviews! I'm honestly so flattered and grateful that you found the fic engaging enough to read until the end; this really, really means a lot to me, especially as this story isn't one which I have a lot of confidence with. So thanks again.

I'm glad you like the details! I really had a lot of fun crafting aspects of the Ministry setting, and I love how you referred to Ettie's workplace as her 'rebellious office'. Ha! I did want to make the scene come to life, and so your comments really made my day!

Ah, I'm glad you like the scene with Cho! Yes, there certainly is a lot of bitterness from the latter toward Ettie (LOVE your metaphor of dead things in between the two!) and I'm pleased to hear that Cho's charactersation is realistic, despite her brief appearance in this fic.

Your dream story? THANK YOU ♥ ♥


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