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Review:UnluckyStar57 says:
Hi! I'm here with the review you requested. :)

I thought that this flowed very well! It was a very cute story, and I am so glad that Ron and Hermione's relationship was not one of constant bickering and fighting and general meanness.

The perspective of this is just excellent. I loved seeing all of Ron's thoughts and memories about Hermione, how he loved her hair the first time he saw her and how he didn't want it to be tamed. It's absolutely adorable to see him being so sentimental, especially since he has "the emotional range of a teaspoon." Obviously, Hermione was a little bit wrong about that. ;)

The only thing that didn't really work was this part: "She tried to pull it back but he wouldn't let her. Spending as much time touching her hair as he did the rest of her." The second sentence is a fragment, and while fragments can be used to great effect, I think that this one needs to be incorporated into a sentence somehow. The rest of the paragraph flowed nicely, but then that sentence kind of stopped the motion a bit awkwardly. But that was really the only thing that I noticed! :)

The spelling/grammar was GREAT! A+! I love it when stories never have a letter or comma out of place. It makes me happy. :D

Characterization was fabulous, of course! Ron loves Hermione, and he loves Hermione's hair. This story was about that, and you pulled it off very nicely! The memories really added a whole new dimension to his character that I haven't seen before. :)

And I hope that Rose has Hermione's hair, too. I think that the idea of Ron being an overprotective father is cute. (Except I hope that he learns to let go, too, or else it won't be so cute anymore.) ;D

Great one-shot!! :)

~UnluckyStar57

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I appreciate the feedback :)
I don't do much editing before I post, so thank you for pointing out that part. I'll go back and fix it.

I love the bickering Ron and Hermione, but I wanted to capture a quiet, romantic side of them too. And JKR spent so much time talking about Hermione's hair I just thought that it would be a great subject for Ron to focus on. Something that she is insecure about and dislikes about herself but he loves it because it's her.

Of course Rose has Hermione's hair! haha I can't imagine her with anything else. :)

Thank you for a wonderful review
~Shiloh


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