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Review:Lululuna says:
Review swap! :)

Devlin teaching Emma to dance was so cute! I love how she brings out the part of him which just wants to see him happy, and how he's admitting that to himself and to her. I feel like he has changed and developed a lot through the past few chapters and it's really cool to see.

Devlin's hate for Bellatrix is interesting. I feel like she was one of the few female figures he would have known which might explain his general hostility and suspicion of the women he meets, though he isn't much more open with the men either. The idea of her teaching Devlin to dance is kind of nice, but also creeps me out a little.

Oh, I also really like how Emma is one of the few people that Devlin actually calls by their name, not "the man" or "the woman." I think she used to be called "the girl" more frequently, but now he actually uses her name when he thinks about her. I also think I've noticed Devlin stopping referring to Harry's eyes are "Killing Curse" (makes me wonder where he's seen the killing curse!) so much, which is a really subtle way of showing how he is adjusting.

Of how heartbroken the girl would be, when he died. She would be safe, though - and that was all that mattered. Okay, so I'm really worried about the ambiguous pronoun of 'he' here. Who is going to die - Harry or Devlin?! Ahh!!

I thought the moment where Emma hides under Devlin's blankets so he can change really endearing and relatable as something a child might do. It's nice to see how they feel more comfortable with each other and are actually sort of hanging out. :)

You write Snape really well. He's a tricky character to get right but you've really written him perfectly here, with the surly and snarky behaviour but a hint that his brain is always churning and thinking.

I suppose Harry is the perfect person to do a guest lecture on the Unforgivable curses, seeing as he's survived one! :P I'm really excited for them to go to Hogwarts and what characters they might encounter there. It's interesting how Dumbledore is more inclined to want to probe Devlin about the Death Eaters, but fits with how Dumbledore uses Harry in the books and not necessarily for his own good, precisely. I like how you've kept a lot of the crucial characters alive as well. :)

Great chapter, I can't wait to come back and read the next one! :D

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