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Review:marauderfan says:
Hello! I'm here with your requested review!

So, you mainly asked about characterisation. In general, I think it's very good. Rosalind in particular is very well written, and I love this air of mystery she has around her. Especially the way Morgaine seems to be narrating from a much later time, it really adds to the effect as there are all sorts of clues dropped as she considers her past.

Morgaine is a great character. I love the idea that Slyherin had an older sister, particularly one as important as she is! And the fact that she was so close to both Godric and Salazar is really cool. The one thing that didn''t have much continuity with her character was that in the beginning she views Godric as a squealing brat, and then immediately after, she wants to be his mentor. It seemed a little abrupt for someone who previously had no patience for a toddler. What made her change her mind? I think that could use a bit more of a transition.

Other than that though, I liked the way you wrote her. She seemed a bit grown up for her age but I think that makes a lot of sense given that this is some future version of her narrating and thnking about the past. I'm really excited to see what happens to her after she leaves, and how she'll continue to play into the story of Salazar and Godric.

By the way, that was a clever way of having those two become the best friends we know they were!

Excellent work on this chapter!

Author's Response: Thank you for a great review! I am glad you think Rosalind is well characterised - I wasn't sure if I'd made her, say, too enigmatic, but I also didn't want to give too much away.

I did reread the chapter to see about the mentioned sudden transition with Morgaine's character regarding Godric, and you are right! I had completely missed that bit, because I see the story the way I've imagined with bits and pieces that have not been mentioned in the chapter for length purposes, so it did not seem abrupt to me lol. I will go back and revise that bit, so thank you for pointing it out :)

Yes, as for her sounding older, I am quite aware, but there was no way around it - I didn't want her to be too much older than Godric and Salazar. Basically she is one of my favourite characters in this story :)

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