TAG! Right back at you. :P
Grace has gotten herself into such a pickle with Remus, but I can't say I'm overly sympathetic to her plight. She and Remus seem to have this amazing connection, so I secretly think that she should just go with the flow and ignore her destiny and how mean Snape is for now. :) I want to say that they're only sixteen and there's lots of time, but this is the Potterverse and James and Lily are going to be having a baby in a few short years, so I suppose that they are on a limited time frame.
Sirius was quite sweet here! I like how protective he is of Remus, and how he intervenes with Grace to talk about his friend's feelings. He has a really good point, however, with how likely Grace is to hurt Remus' feelings by acting so secretive and ashamed.
I was wondering, why is Grace so baffled by wizard currency? I think she came from America, so do the American wizards have a certain type of coin or just use Muggle money, or was Grace just too busy hunting demons to go shopping? A little mention of why she was so baffled might make that part even funnier. :)
I like the detail about Peter freaking out about the unicorn horn materials. It seems really in character with him here that he would overstress and worry about little things. I also like how assertive Sirius is, and how peppy and excited James gets when Lily's name is mentioned. It's quite endearing, and you write all the Marauders so distinctly and well. :)
The inclusion of the canon scene was really great - it didn't even occur to me that it was a year later. It actually sort of worked because I don't think there was necessary proof that Snape had apologized immediately after the Mudblood incident - for all I know it could have taken a year for him to get the chance (i.e. Grace being there!). It was a great tie-in with the books, and Mary is just hilarious.
Poor Remus. :( I felt so sorry for him when Grace runs after Snape - it's like the cherry on top for an impossible relationship. He's certainly justified in feeling crushed, poor boy. As for Severus himself, he really doesn't deserve to have Grace's attention! I like how you've kept him in character with his loathsome and rude behaviour and obsession with Lily, and how you make it difficult for Grace to get on with him, even if she is quite patient.
Agh, they're in another Cruor simulation?! Well, I hope it's simulated, because otherwise that is even more terrifying. Something tells me the Cruors are not going to end the test just to suit Grace - they really are a bunch of lazy puppetmasters in my opinion. :P
All caught up! :D I'm really excited for the next chapter. There's so much to look forward to: the visit to the Potters, Grace and Remus, the war in Cruor Terra, the future... oh, and whether Grace and Severus will survive this test!!! Can't wait! :D
Author's Response: Hey!
Grace, if you hadn't already figured that out, really doesn't know what the halibut she's doing most of the time ;). I wouldn't expect anybody to sympathize with her over Remus, because realistically she could probably date him for a while without consequence (or too much, anyway).
Sirius is good people, even if he and Grace don't get along right away. He does have a good point :D.
Oh, mph, another one of the things that I know but nobody else does because I didn't actually write it in the story. Grace is used to Muggle money, not wizarding money (from any country)-- I'll have to throw a little bit of information in.
Aw, thanks! I'm glad you like the Marauders!
No, there was never any real proof that the scene occurred right after, but it was bugging my head-cannon. Since this is strong AU, I keep trying to keep the things that I can close to cannon, and what better way to do that than actual cannon? :D Heheh, poor Mary. Everything about her character currently is the opposite of my head-cannon, but she serves her purpose.
:( Poor Remus. I don't enjoy writing a sad Remus, I have a little alternative story on the side for personal use, where I can rewrite certain scenes that make me sad (an AU of my AU?). Severus isn't very nice, is he?...actually, he's hardly even civil -_-.
Whoo, to Cruor (more action)! Heheh, I love that you hate the Cruors.
Yay! The next chapter is in the queue, and there's a TON of things that still need to happen. Ah, one thing at a time :D.