Hey there, stopping by for our review swap! :)
I really enjoyed this! I love Teddy/Victoire and minor characters and unusual pairings, so when I saw this on your page I just had to read it!
I love that you made it so believable and not the 'conventional' pairing in fanfiction, you know? With Victoire marrying Teddy first, having kids with him and being in the 'perfect fairytale romance', and then Teddy dying and her falling in love again with Dennis and remarrying. I love that. Seriously. It's so nice and fresh to see something new on the archives - and this is really unique! :)
Victoire's character is so lovely, as well. I love how she's clever and talented but still worries about exams, because it's so realistic. The way you carried her, and us, through the individual scenes you showed was so good - I loved how she grew up through them, but also was still decidedly her, you know?
Teddy was so sweet, too! So cheeky and perhaps not quite so talented as Victoire. I loved the way you mentioned that he could have had a better position in the Ministry, but how he didn't want to joyride on Harry's fame, as it really shows such depth to his character!
I have to say, when I first read this I was a bit confused by how it was an unusual/rare pairing, since it said Teddy/Victoire, but I really, really love how you built it up with the fairytale-style romance - childhood sweethearts and all that jazz - and then made it crash with Teddy's death and Victoire's remarriage.
Your writing in this was so lovely, too. It was really clear, free of mistakes, and your description was great too (though maybe a little bit more here and there? Then again, I tend to write a lot, so feel free to ignore that if it's just me ;D). I really loved your dialogue - you write it so well!
The details you included in this were great, too! You really developed the setting of this and the characters. I loved how Victoire mentioned how her mother passed away, and how she didn't want her whole family in the hospital. It was those little things which really helped bring the sense of time to it.
This was a really lovely one-shot! We should swap again in the future so I can finish reading this (I have a terrible memory otherwise...) ;)
Author's Response: Hey, thanks so much for the swap. I feel really bad about the mix-up with yours. But hey, at least I noticed!
I'm glad that it caught your eye!
I'm really really happy that you thought she was still her own character. I really worried while writing this, because I don't like it when somebody's life is defined entirely by another person.
Awww, Teddy is really just a big Teddy bear (har...har...har...).
I totally agree that I could use more description. That's something I constantly have to work on.
Thank you so much for such a great review! We will have to swap again, I'd love to get more feedback from you.