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Review:teh tarik says:
Ooh, Marina, I can't remember if I've ever read any of your stories! Which is awful of me, and here I am to rectify that. Also, I hope you don't mind that I didn't leave a review for your prologue, but it really looks like this chapter needs a bit of love.

Goodness, your prologue was completely gripping! I have no idea exactly what Teddy and Victoire have been through, or how their assignment on poachers could have gone so wrong and put them through so much danger. You're really good at revealing nothing, and yet keeping your reader completely hooked. :P Ahh, I loved all the little sensory details: the heat, the flies and cockroaches, the washing strung on wire and the narrow alley between the shack. Everything was so vivid and so, so tense and fast-paced and that mystery attacker at the end...was just terrifying. You're lovely at writing action sequences.

And I love this first chapter here as well - how you set up Victoire's life and her job and her relationship with her fiance. I love how normal everything seems, such a perfect contrast to the chaos and terror of the prologue, and I'm on the verge of shouting at my screen in some vain attempt to stop Teddy and Victoire from making the trip. I'm not sure what to make of Thane, except he is a really demanding boss, and it's no surprise how pressured Victoire feels into going on this trip. And I love her relationship with Teddy! Teddy as the Maid of Honour has got to be the best thing in a Teddy/Victoire fic. And I also really enjoyed that small moment you wrote between Rob and Victoire, and their argument which then ends in a tender moment. Also, I love how you've started both chapters so far with Victoire's letters to Rob. I'm very interested to read on and find out if their relationship will last through the ordeal that Victoire and Teddy are about to experience.

This is a wonderful and incredibly exciting story! I'll be following this and I'm looking forward to your update! Thanks for agreeing to do a swap with me. :D

-teh

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