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Review:NinthHorcrux says:
Hi! Read your story and found it extremely interesting!

I'm curious though about a lot of things. First, who is Victoria Potter and how is/is she related to Harry? also, what era is this in? You just put "other" so now I'm REALLY curious! Also, I'm wondering how your main character is canon...I don't remember ever hearing that name. Was she a sorting hat character?

So, your story. It was very good, well-written. It's snappy and intriguing. You displayed points very well. I found Sacharissa's opinions well supported and agreed on quite a few. She's right that first impression is extremely effective as to what a person thinks of another. It's just so interesting to see how her mind works! She's definitely got a unique voice...so good job!

Don't get me wrong...I like the idea of her trying to win over this guy's heart with looks alone, but marriage seems slightly extreme. How old are they? I mean, they're still at school so...maybe it would work better to have them go out or something. That's just my opinion.

About your story being too short...it was so well built up and then sort of ended abruptly, leaving me like "Wha...?!?!" ;) anyway, I think this would be, if you want to, very cool to follow up on with a few more chapters...maybe...? It's all up to you of course, as the author.

I really like the magical element to this too, with beauty potions.

Well done! I enjoyed this story a lot and found it extremely intriguing! Of course I long for more, but if you don't want to that's all fine of course. :) Good work!

Author's Response: Sacharissa Tugwood is a canon character; she was the creator of the beauty potions and she was born in 1874, explaining why she is focused on marriage. The wizarding world is rather behind than the Muggle world when it comes to societal standards and such in my opinion, and even if they weren't, marriage seemed more like the priority for women in the 19th century.

I'm glad that you liked the story! I really appreciate your comments and constructive criticism! :)


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