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Review:academica says:
Hey Pix, here for chapter two!

Really nice job again this chapter with showing how Gran is deteriorating after the loss of Frank and Alice. It seems like her suffering is the combined result of her old age and depression. It's so sad to see a witch who was so skilled wither away like that, and yet it's interesting that her magic doesn't seem to have ebbed away at the same rate as her mind. Still, I'm sad for Wren, having to shoulder that particular burden.

Dillon is interesting. There's something sort of creepy and suspicious about him, and I wonder if it has to do with that bright light Wren saw in the last chapter. On the surface, though, he's a cute kid and I like how his presence gave Wren something to focus on besides her own problems.

Maybe there is something even bigger going on, though. The way that policeman acted has me feeling a bit uneasy, and I wonder if Wren was a bit too self-absorbed at the moment to really comprehend his ominous tone. You've set up a lot of intriguing plot lines for the coming chapters.

Nice work once again! Very much enjoying this!

-Amanda

Author's Response:

Chapter two! *dances for joy*

An old, powerful witch like that, I always wondered what happens to magic as a wizard ages. Does it fade away with the deterioration of the body, or does it accumulate within them? We don't have clear answers on that. I know Dumbledore was old, and he was really powerful, so I'm just winging it here. It's an interesting topic to consider, isn't it?

I'm glad the unease of the chapter came through. Dillon is creepy AND suspicious. And yeah, Wren is definitely too into her own issues to see him clearly.

Thanks for coming back to my story!

Pix



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