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Review:maraudertimes says:
Hello!

I quite liked this chapter better than the other one. It had more action and less talking, though the explanations were relatively spaced out, so it didn't get tedious!

The one thing I would watch is that Eilley's comment about her metabolism. It shouldn't matter if she has a high metabolism or not considering she's a fairly good (great) quidditch player if what I've gathered from this chapter is true. If she's that good, four muffins might warrant a metabolism comment, but two? Seems a little bit too insignificant.

Other than that, great job! I honestly wanted to punch James in the face when he made that weight comment. But poor Al. I think he really truly does like Eilley, but she just won't give him the time of day!

Good job!
Lo:)

Author's Response: Hey there! I'm glad you liked this chapter better (the edited version of #1 is in the queue!) As for James and the weight comment- I have thought about how to change it, but I decided you had to have some sort of character hate. As for Al- you'll see how their interactions continue... *dun-dun-dun*
XOXOXOXO,
LLG


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