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Review:academica says:
Hi, I'm here from Review Tag!

Aww, it's too bad you edited this so it's not SOC anymore. I would have loved to see you attempt it and read the result. Oh well, I understand the desire to edit when you find mistakes :)

I like how you were able to narrate the action minute by minute in this short one-shot. It was also great to see that it had a happy ending. I do think the little part where she thought he was dead came and went a bit abruptly, but I can see how the word count might have affected that, if it was part of the challenge.

I think you need to either go back over this for technical details or have a beta look at it for you. I saw several places where you used a comma instead of a semi-colon and others where you had run-on sentences. Leaving these mistakes in affects the quality and flow of your work, so you might want to go back and have them corrected. I'm sure a Quick Beta could do it for you.

Good work!

-Amanda

Author's Response: I know I had to edit, but I still love this little one-shot, thank you for your review I will certainly have a beta look at it, once I get to the middle of BDITS (which is my main project for now) but hopefully spring break will let me look over my other fics. :)

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