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Review:FredWeasleyIsMyKing says:
Hello :)

Laurenzo7321 here with your requested review. So first of all this is the very first founders fic I've ever read and I'm really enjoying it.

I think the fact that you've started it when the children are really young is quite interesting, I never imagined the founders fics to be like this. I also love how you've brought them together so far and I'm quite excited to see how Helga get's brought into the story now!

I really love the characterisation of all your OCs so far. Lord and Lady Slytherin in particular are really good, although I didn't really like the Earl, but I got the feeling I wasn't supposed to? How horrible he is to Rowena, poor girl. The end of the chapter definitely left me with an excited feeling of where the story was going to go next though.

Also! Is the Slythrin castle going to become Hogwarts? You mentioned the great hall at one point and it suddenly clicked. I hope so as that will be really cool!

So for your areas of concern... The flow of the story I thought was good, although in that last section it kind of feels like the end of another prologue because you're skipping time on again. That's not necessarily a bad thing, as you've said you need to move the story on and from my point of view it did make me excited to read more. I think maybe the wand giving is something you could have made a bigger deal about though if you do want to extend it. Otherwise, I think it's fine.

This is a really good story so far though, you've got some really great ideas and you've actually got me wanting to read more founder stuff! Your descriptions are good and there's some interesting characterisation!

Lauren :)

Author's Response: Thank you for such an amazing review!

Yup, Lady and Lord Slytherin are one of the main characters, and I am glad that you thought that their characterisation is good. And while the Earl is not necessarily a bad character (in terms of a villain), he is most certainly not someone I like. He is basically a power-hungry politician, not particularly bright, but at his position with the King for a lack of a better option, and very narrow-minded.

Um... for Slytherin Castle becoming Hogwarts ... maybe :D

As for the rushed bits, including Rowena getting her wand, I did think so too myself, but as you said - I needed to rush the introduction, since I don't want, like, a dozen chapter being all about introduction. I didn't feel that it was necessary to the plot.

Again, thank you for the detailed review, it really means a lot to me, especially from someone who is reading a Founders Era for the first time (YAY!) :D


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