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Review:Pixileanin says:
The memories seem to hit Harry a lot harder than his wife. I do admit that I'm going with Geoffrey's first instinct: maybe Devlin's mother has already accepted that he's out of her reach... or maybe she's just a big beast of a mother that will turn on him when he's not expecting it.

I loved your descriptions of when Devlin was afraid. "Devlin did not need to act afraid to be afraid." This explains so much of what I saw in the first chapter. And then following up with "... as long as you are afraid, you are human." I think I know where Harry is going with this. You manage to pour so much emotion into this scene without getting sappy. I am in awe of the depth here. I think I told someone else recently that dark stories come from the darkness of the content, not merely from the description surrounding them. I should just point them here to this chapter as an example. There's no dusty roads, no thunderstorms, no gloomy lighting. Just sheer horror.

With a hint of a hope.

The way that Geoffrey cares about the boy, it comes across as very genuine. I understand that his life depends on it, but it seems to go deeper than that. When he gets the opportunity to run, he takes it. I suppose at this point, he feels that Devlin is safer with him than without him. I find that interesting. The fear he has for the boy is also very intriguing. Devlin must be powerful by now, if it's been four years since that memory.

I love how you ended this chapter. It's almost cliffhanger-y, because I really want to know what Devlin will do, once he's brought up to speed about how Geoffrey took him away from Voldemort. Geoffrey is afraid of his wand, and Devlin looks about on the edge of panic. This cannot be a good thing for Harry. I hope he can handle whatever comes next.

Your writing is consistently crisp and enticing. You seem to know just which buttons to push and what information to hold back in order to keep us guessing. I am really enjoying this story a lot!

Author's Response: I hope you've seen Alexandra in a better light in further chapters. I think she is just more analytical and keeps her emotions under control.

"I think I told someone else recently that dark stories come from the darkness of the content, not merely from the description surrounding them. I should just point them here to this chapter as an example. There's no dusty roads, no thunderstorms, no gloomy lighting. Just sheer horror."

That's a huge compliment, so thank you. Wait until we start dealing with Snape - I think you will really enjoy those chapters.

Geoffrey is very interesting. He's very protective of Devlin from anything and everyone.

I really enjoy cliffhangers. I think you'll be able to count on one hand the chapters that DON'T end in a cliffhanger in this story.

Thank you for such a wonderful review!


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