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Review:Lululuna says:
Review swap! :)

I loved this chapter so much. It was really exciting, I was on the edge of my seat the whole time! First, the nightmare. I really loved this line: Most of the time Dubhn's only evidence that he'd had a nightmare was the dissipation of a silencing charm when he opened his door. This was truly brilliant writing, and so vivid in exploring the relationship and the life that Devlin would have had with "Grandfather." It really stuck with me. I also liked how Alexandra understands Devlin quite well and knows how to convince him to do what she wants.

The shopping trip was really exciting. The moment with them going into the Leaky Cauldron reminded me so much of Harry's first trip there in PS, and how he understood how confused and irritated Devlin must be feeling at all the attention. Little details here to show Devlin's character and his projected character are great, like when he says he doesn't care about the colours of his robes.

I really liked Hermione as well, how she was concerned about going into the bookshop, and how she is the one Harry turns to when asking academic questions about Occlumency.

The scene in the bookshop was so intense: how the person was hiding behind the shelf and was revealed one eye at a time from behind the books- that visual was amazing. Then how Devlin drops the books and gets Harry's attention- I think he didn't want to admit it that he doesn't want to leave and go back to Voldy. :) Which makes me happy. I'm predicting that the man in the bookshop was Malfoy, personally.

It was very chilling how the man in the bookstore recognize him as Dubhan and greeted him like that: I imagine that would be so painful for Harry, to think about how his son might have been so close when he was living his life, thinking Devlin was dead. Harry's anger interests me as well, how it almost reminds Devlin of Voldy... I was wondering, what's the mind connection between Harry and Voldemort in this story? Do they still have the link which lets Harry see into Voldy's mind? You don't need to answer that if it gives anything away, but it was just a thought which occurred to me. :)

Wow, Snape sure sneers a lot, doesn't he? :P I smiled at how Harry was surprised that Snape was in his house- it's interesting how they hate one another but Snape seems rather at Harry's beck and call. The moment with Geoffrey was amazing as well, how he was betraying his master all along- that was fascinating. I'm really looking forward to finding out what happens next. :)

Author's Response: Oh, we're on quite the roll, aren't we? How exciting! :D

Thank you. This is one of my very favorite chapters.

I hope maybe you have some clue about the nightmare that we ended in the last chapter. It's definitely not something he wants to explain to Harry.

The shopping trip. You'll get a sense of why Devlin didn't go with Malfoy soon enough.

I honestly thought that Voldemort would probably get a perverse satisfaction by parading Devlin out in public where Potter might see him but never does. I imagined that when Voldemort sees himself killing Potter he fantasizes that at that moment he will tell Potter 'your son is alive' and detail each and every time Potter failed to 'rescue' him.

I love that you have picked up on Harry's anger. I haven't really meant to hide the fact, just sort of introduce it organically like it was in the books - so I'll answer. The connection is there and so is the Horcrux. In the past the connection and I assume the Horcrux have effected Harry's behaviors - but I think if Harry were more stressed, more angry, more time in a war, his son ripped away from him and more jaded, etc. etc. that the Horcrux piece might have some more sway over him. I mentioned it first in the first chapter, when he describes feeling a particular kind of anger when he captures Geoffrey.

Was he betraying his master?

"“He told me to keep the boy safe at all costs,” the Death Eater said. “I did.”"

Isn't that following orders?

;-)

Off to read your brilliant story after I feed the dogs. :)


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