The imagery of the cup of tea in the first paragraph already tells me something about this Geoffrey character. He's calculating. In that dangerous, wait-and-see sort of way. It's kind of creepy, and a little bit enticing, because I want to know more about him now.
Apparently, so does Harry. In a bad, bad way.
There was an interesting anomaly in your writing in this chapter. It slips into present tense where Harry is involved. I don't know if that was done on purpose for stylistic purposes or not, so I thought I'd mention it. The compariason that Geoffrey makes between Harry's magic and the boy's is also disturbing. It makes me think that he knows a lot, and I'm wondering now exactly how much he's willing to divulge. How much is at stake here?
I just want to stop here and say that I am ever so happy in this AU world that Sirius Black is alive. There. Moving on.
Geoffrey's acute observations remind me of the way Devlin picked up on things in the first chapter. It might be because they are both werewolves, or because he's spent too much time being distrustful. I don't particularly enjoy the parallel, but it just made things twice as interesting.
And the immediate anger, the way Geoffrey reacted when he realized that Harry didn't protect his own son, that was exhausting! This man cares for Devlin like a father would. I can see that he would be angry at the fact that the boy's own father was not capable of protecting him like this man, but still, I have doubts about this.
Oh, and the little boy who is no longer a little boy! My heart broke for him, but I cheered for his strength, that he somehow had the will to thrive in such a horrible environment. I read all the way to the end, I was so caught up in the story. In this memory, Devlin is young enough to remember who his mother is. I wonder, after those four years, if he'd have the ability to remember any of his parents' lessons, or if they will be overwritten my Voldemort's influence. That is truly a frightening thought.
Splendid chapter! I want more!
Author's Response: "He's calculating. In that dangerous, wait-and-see sort of way. It's kind of creepy, and a little bit enticing, because I want to know more about him now." You have summed Geoffrey up faster than any other reader so far.
The present tense issue...yeah. The story was originally written in the present tense. Sometimes in early chapters while rewriting I slipped back. I will be editing all the chapters soon. :)
I think Geoffrey absolutely knows a lot. ;-)
I love Sirius Black! Although to be fair, when I started this story years ago (3rd rewrite, I think), Sirius Black was still alive and this story wasn't as AU as it is now. All cannon information has been incorporated though.
Interesting comparison with Geoffrey and Devlin.
"This man cares for Devlin like a father would. I can see that he would be angry at the fact that the boy's own father was not capable of protecting him like this man, but still, I have doubts about this." Doubts are good to have. He definitely wants to keep the boy safe. But why hand him over now?
I won't ruin the surprise for you. You'll find out in the next two chapters if he remembers.
Awesome review. Loving your story, BTW. I'm still growing in my reviewing talents, so pardon my sub-par review of your story. I get better as a story progresses and I have had time to wonder and ponder on the plot. :)