HI THERE. I promised I was gonna read your stuff, and so I HAVE.
Guh. That sounded so creepy and stalkerish. Sorry, not sorry.
COS THIS WAS SO FUN. I mean, fun in a dark and sadistic way, which is the best kind of fun, clearly. As I'm sure you're aware, I have an unhealthy affinity for the Black Family, and Bellatrix is no exception. I named my car after her. True story. But really off topic.
ON TOPIC. First: voice. Dude, you've got it. People teach whole semester-long classes on how to seamlessly tie a character's thoughts/emotions into the narration itself. It's a really tough nuance to get the hang of. NAILED IT.
Second: subject. I just gotta say, you took on one difficult subject. I hate it when people dismiss Bellatrix in adjectives like "psycho" and "b*tch." Sure, she may be those things, but I think she's a very complex character. And the most complex part about her is her incredibly powerful attachment to Voldemort.
What I love most about the way that you relate Bellatrix's thoughts is that they are spelled out in the most cool, rational way. They're not psychobabble or incoherent ramblings; Bellatrix's motivation and her end goal make perfect sense, and I think THAT's what make them so chilling. I love the paragraph on lust. A lust for power, a lust for Voldemort himself--that was the perfect way to describe it. Favorite sentence: "There was no hint of a sincere apology in his voice, and she liked that."
I always pictured Bellatrix as more subservient and less bold around Lord Voldemort, but I really, really like your interpretation. Okay, and this is completely personally motivated, but I loved seeing so much pride and independence in Bellatrix, because it strikes me as a shared trait in at least two of the Black sisters. >:] Just played out in two very different ways...
YAY. Such a good read. Out of curiosity, did you personally choose which Jane Austen quote to include? Because I loved it, and I loved the fact that it was taken from my very favorite Jane Austen novel.
Author's Response: Hello! I'm sorry that it's taken me about a million years to respond to this lovely review, but I just got lazy and busy (at the same time). Darn real life!
Thanks so much for reading this story! I'm not sorry that you're not sorry, hahaha.
Oh wow, a car named Bellatrix?! That's, umm, a bit creepy! Like Christine, but the car will Avada you instead. :P But yes, I'm glad that I could cater to your Black family obsession. :D
NO!! That's so nice of you to say! I'm probably your biggest fan right now, not just because of this review, but because of KYD too, haha. But really?! I just don't even know what to say. *hugs*
Yeah, dealing with Bellatrix was really difficult, but I'm actually pretty happy with the way it all panned out. I wanted to steer clear of the "psycho" and "she-devil" categories, since those seem to have been explored pretty thoroughly. I wanted Bellatrix to have autonomy and a drive--not just for sex, but for power. I am SO HAPPY that you thought it all made sense. She's an irrational being with rational thoughts, and sometimes that's the most dangerous sort of person.
Thank you, thank you, thank you!! I love reading people's reviews when they have favorite lines--I think I surprise myself sometimes with the way I put words together. And then when people quote them back to me, I'm like, "Derrr, did I write that?" It makes me feel good/stupid at the same time. :)
Yeah, in the books she's really subservient, but the Bella that I imagined isn't that way. I would like to think that the years changed her--she finally realized that the playing field would never be equal because she was lusting after the power of a man who was never taught to share his toys. (Okay, after I wrote that sentence, I just thought, "Bad Voldy! Let the other kids play in your sandbox!" I'm a weirdo.) So she had to change.
But yeah, I actually think that all of the Black sisters have that sort of pride and independence--but they use it in VERY different ways, of course. Bella defied the traditional role of pureblood women and became a Death Eater--one of the only females. Andromeda revolted and married Ted (so much love, new fave OTP, omg). Even Narcissa has it--she defied Voldemort by lying about Harry's death in exchange for information about Draco. Perhaps she's less independent than the other two, but it's definitely a part of her.
So yup. Musings on the Black sisters. I hardly feel qualified to analyze them, but there you go.
Actually, nope! I picked a number, and the quote happened to be from Persuasion. It's a happy coincidence that it's your favorite Austen novel. :) And the funny thing is, the quote is said by a girl to her brother--the situation in the novel is much less... Intense than the one in my story.
Thanks for the marvelous review!!