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Review:toomanycurls says:
Hello!! Doing our review swap!! Harry and Ginny's conversation is perfectly awkward and sweet. I could really see him trying to make things up like this. I mean, neither of them really can understand what the other has gone through.

haha, Mrs. Weasley is quite protective. I imagine that she kind of suspects they're mending their relationship right about now. Oh woah, I mean, it seems a bit obvious that they'd fix the castle by magic but I'm blown away that they did it so fast.

It's fitting that they'd both hit up quidditch to sort out their thoughts. I do think her going to school while he's doing stuff in the Ministry will be a huge blocker in their relationship - not like him being on the run was. he'll be able to visit.

You write the quidditch action extremely well in this part.

oh!!! I love that you ended with her meeting Gwenog Jones! I thought she might have in the Slug Club (at least Hermione made it sound like she met her there and Ginny was involved in that). but, still, it's a good dramatic ending to the chapter.

-rose

Author's Response: Hello!
Thanks so much for the thoughtful review! I'm glad you thought Harry and Ginny's conversation was good, I did struggle with it quite a bit, so I'm happy to hear that it turned out well.
You make a good point about the castle. The way I wrote it makes it very unclear and I should fix that, but in my mind, the castle isn't completely restored, but is fit enough to function. I might add that in if I ever go back and edit things. Thanks so much for pointing that out!
Thanks so much for your kind words about the Quidditch scene! I hoped it was clear.
You bring up another problem. I did think a lot about Gwenog meeting Ginny. I knew that, under all normal circumstances, of course Ginny would recognize her immediately. The Harpies are her favorite team. However, I did think (largely for the purposes of plot) that Gwenog would quite likely be scared beyond recognition (what with the war and playing Quidditch professionally). Obviously, it would have been ideal to address this before the end of this chapter, because it does seem very un-canon without explaination, but in order to leave this cliff-hanger, it had to be done. However, I do address this in the opening scene of the third chapter :D
I really cannot thank you enough for your thoughtful input!
Christy


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