As always, the descriptions you've used to set the scene are breathtaking. I can feel the dampness in the air, hanging thickly with the ominous feeling of what's to come! (Yes, I'm excited, don't mind me.) Stephane's plan to lure the children from Hamlin, although backed with the very best of intentions-- to save them from a fate at the hands of the muggle offenders, where they would surely die --seems an awfully close to kidnapping. I really hope he knows what he's doing, and it seems as though he does. Yet, how will the children feel when they realize, although saved from their fate, that everybody that they love have been slaughtered while they live, led my this mysterious man who would then call himself a hero or a savior? I mean, I want the children to be okay, but I'm not sure that Stephane's plan is completely sound. Argh, with the mixed feelings.
The parade of children, marching away from their homes, was written beautifully. I can only imagine their parent's fear, confusion, and overwhelming worry. As Peverell briefly gives thought to, it is the time of the Plague, and many of the parents have already lost a number of their children, if not other loved ones. The way the spell is affecting the children is very similar to the Imperious Curse, causing them to act against their will. The strength they possess makes sense, as they have a single task that must not be interrupted. The strength ensures that.
Perevell possesses Death's invisibility cloak, and that is beyond awesome! His concern for his daughter, as well as the other children, is very endearing! I'll cheer him on as well, which means that I will be cheering for both parties. That's an odd position to take, but I can't decide who is more right, yet. In a similar situation, I feel as though I would attempt to hide my daughter from Death as well.
"For a moment, they look not like children, but animated corpses, an army of the loveless dead." --Gah, this is fabulous! Stephane's reconsideration really reveals some of his true personality. He feels as though he might not be doing the right thing, and that is positively marvelous because he actually wants to help the children...to help Marigold.
Just wow. The emotions are so powerful, but how could they not be? The muggles don't understand what's actually happening, and sum it up to the work of the Devil. They're making a mistake, but they're ignorant. Ignorance usually leaves some kind of destruction in it's wake. Something bad is going to happen, isn't it? The poor children...and the townspeople!
The arrival at the castle, and the awakening of the children is almost heartbreaking. They're saved, yes, but as Hufflepuff wonders, what is going to happen to their parents? I don't know whether or not to be happy yet! It's a mixed feeling of joy and despair and I'm not entirely sure how to process that!
"In Hamlin, night falls." --Something bad is definitely going to happen. This is where I should definitely be covering my eyes, but I can't because I will be unable to read the rest of the chapter. *Deep breath* Here goes nothing. Oh gods, not Perevell! You can't kill Marigold's father, angry mob! ...they killed him...he's dead. I can't believe he's dead. He passed on the cloak to his daughter, and greeted Death willingly. Yeah, Rumpel's crying. I'm okay. Radley loses his son...and Trips' father loses his livelihood... his hands.
And then morning comes, and everything is lost.
That was...powerful and intense. And wow, fantastic.
Author's Response: Hello! :D
It's wonderful to hear you liked the feeling of the story, the descriptions and the ominous air. This chapter was very mysterious and tragic, and I really wanted that to come through. You're completely right- it is kidnapping, even if it's for a good end. And Stephane's plan has consequences and repercussions which the founders didn't consider or worry about.
It's lovely to hear you liked the description of the children leaving- I felt it would be extremely chilling and inhuman. It is rather like the Imperius curse: that was sort of how I rationalized the piper's tune in the wizarding context. The song creates a sort of mind-numbing compulsion, and there's something very wrong and painful about it.
I'm glad you support Peverell! He has a unique perspective on Death and what to do, considering he is a medical man and generally rather aware and wise. It is quite hard to determine who is right or not- both sides have their dangers and flaws.
Yes, Stephane's heart is in the right place. He doesn't want to hurt anybody, but he also does want to succeed for his father and to be noticed among the other Founders.
Ignorance is often destructive, and that is just what's happened here. Really, there was no other way for the muggles to react to such a sight.
I'm glad you found it heartbreaking! I felt that reaching there safely is very bittersweet. I think that the parents couldn't be equally swayed by magic because their minds are stronger and more developed- that was my rationale for it anyway. It is very sad, especially considering what happens back in Hamlin. :(
Ah, I'm sorry for the mob! It's horrible, how much everything is lost, but ignorance and hate have led to destruction. I actually really liked writing the destruction scene, but it was very emotional and painful at the same time.
Thank you so much for this incredible review, on this chapter and the others! I really can't express how happy it makes me to know how you like the story and how wonderful it is to hear your thoughts! :)