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Review:CambAngst says:
Do you know how hard it is to catch you as the last post in Review Tag? Your stories go flying off the shelf like cookies on clearance! Never mind. I'm tired of trying. I'm just going to review this and skip the pretense.

I really loved this chapter. You put poor Reg in an absolutely terrible situation, one worse than he possibly could have imagined, and we got to see what he's really made of. It turns out that it's probably better stuff than I would have suspected.

First off, though, I thought you did an awesome job with your descriptions at the start. You painted an amazing picture of a dirty, smelly waterfront at night. A great piece of writing!

Bellatrix was written very well, as always, but I thought Snape was the real star of this chapter. You gave him such an icy-calm demeanor, letting just enough emotion crack the surface to give us a small hint of his true motivations. I loved that he wasn't afraid to challenge Bellatrix when he thought it was warranted or beneficial to him. He set a tone from the very start of the chapter, making it clear who among the initiates was in charge.

When you throw Snape together with Mulciber, you had a great combination. Cold and calculating versus loud, emotional and crazy. But somehow they hold it together and manage to work very well until right at the end. It was a good contrast.

Gah, the little girl! That was such a heart-breaking part of this chapter. Also a great plot device -- speaking as a cold, objective author, of course ;) -- to break through Regulus's tenuous mask of emotional control and get to the crux of what makes him tick. I liked the fact that he couldn't do it, although I don't envy you the task of writing the next chapter. It's going to be tough to make this all work in such a way that poor Reg doesn't end up dead somehow.

I'm actually suspicious that Snape will be involved somehow in the final resolution of Reg's troubles. I have no idea what you're planning, but it wouldn't be at all out of character for Snape to modify Mulciber's memory in such a way that he doesn't remember what Regulus did, then use the truth to blackmail Regulus. Isn't speculating fun?

Suggestions? Well, for one I was a little surprised that they didn't don those skeletal Death Eater masks before they attacked. Also, I'm a little surprised that Bellatrix would simply leave them to their task. She's put her own credibility with the Dark Lord on the line here. Maybe she's watching from the shadows or something, but I wouldn't imagine her being that trusting.

Also, a couple of typos:

“Take Lizzie inside, now,” the blood traitor said urgently, fending of several badly-aimed curses at once. -- fending off

“Well, would you like at that?” Mulciber smirked. “Ickle Reggie has gone soft.” -- would you look at that

Great chapter! Looking forward to the next one!

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